This is not bad. It’s very good and emotional. I love the line, “I’d be a mindless follower, and that Sir, is not what I am.” I can’t begin to tell you how much that line speaks to me. So many people go with the flow, always doing what everyone else is doing. They get on the band wagon and off they go their minds numb and filled with stuffing. They have no idea that by conforming to society, they are losing a big part of themselves. They are losing their freedom and their minds. I also really liked the line, “Sometimes I find eyes that follow me, judging and picking at what I’ve done.” This line is very true. In my experience I have the feeling of eyes following me, judging everything I do and have done. At least in a room full of people I know and don’t particularly like. I loved your words, creativity and the way you made such a small paragraph prolific. It’s hard for people to make words come to life by only using a couple of them. You used your words sparingly and with a lot of passion. Kudos to you! You did a very good job!
October 23rd, 2012 at 01:28am