Smoke And Mirrors - Comments

Hahaha thank you Scene_Queen and don't worry I'm actually working on a sequel now

OK you need to make a sequel because it is not OK to leave it like that....Andy and Ashley are my otp so that just hurts me so bad >.< I liked the story but really I think I died on the inside

Thanks Big Bro :) and like I said between school, art, and social life, I'm going to try and find the time to start Smoke and Ash as soon as possible. One thing I can tell you right now is that an unexpected relationship is going to form.

Good ending. I didn't see that coming at all and it left open so many possibilities. That feeling of getting in a car, driving away, not looking back and just wanting to go forward, no matter where, just anywhere but here... it's such a powerful emotion and I think we've all been there at some point.

Well of course. I'm really enjoying writing this and the support of you my my fans encourages me to continue so I plain on seeing this through til the end ^_^

Promising more? You sure know how to please your fans :}

That's an expected response for my girls. They do play big parts. Raven's is bigger than Yuuki's, and hers will be revealed towards the end of Smoke and Mirrors; where as Yuuiks wont be until Smoke and Steam at the earliest. This is just what I have planned so far. For those of you that don't know, Smoke and Steam is the title for the 4th book in the Smoke Saga.

Here at the end of 14 with Ashley and Andy both safe and Kainan locked up I'm wondering what's happening with the girls. What role it is that they're going to play in the grand scheme and I haven't a clue anymore.

Hehe guess you'll have to keep reading ;)

13 not being a perfect 14 isn't anything to sweat. Honestly, it's nice to have a break from the main story once in a while; so long as the story is still entirely covered. And okay now I'm really excited because I want to know what that "one other thing" is :}

Thank you, but I'm not sure how much it's going to connect to chapter 14. The only thing it's really for is to explain where Ashley is physically and one other thing that I can not reveal at this time.

Chapter 13's title and theme are very well done. Even for filler content, I can tell it still has a clear purpose in the overall story and a good one.

I'm so sorry about the typos, I've been trying to fix that problem and I'm about to go back and proof read all of the chapters. Thank you though :}

I like your ideas and how you're ballsy enough to do slash in the urban fantasy genre. But you most definitely need a proof reader, it really distracts from the plot and knocks me right out of the story when a big typo happens or a word is missing. But otherwise this is a really good story.

Awwwwwwwwwwh thank youuuuuu!!!!!!!!!

I really like the Chapter 11. Update. It made my bad day good.

Thx I have par of the nexy chapter writtden, i. Just need to find the time to write the rest and upload

At first I was turned off by the way you draw from different musical groups and anime series for character names, but as I kept reading I fell in love with those same characters and realized that didn't matter. Every artist has some kind of influence from other artists and being able to recognize that is a big part of what makes your story great.

What shines further though is the insight I get into your personality from reading this. The way you draw from your life experiences to express yourself is beautiful. I can't wait to read the next chapter.

thx im a bad speller so I asked one of my best friends if she would start proof reading my storys so hopefully the spelling errors will go away :}

One thing I notice right away is that you have a few sentence mistakes in the summary. It doesn't flow. Other than that I thought that it was a decent story, but not really my type of story. Your descriptiveness (dunno if thats even a real word...? I'm kind of out of it right now) is really good and other than the summary thing I have no complaints. Happy writing!