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  • synonymforsarcasm

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    Love iy
    January 18th, 2014 at 01:44am
  • CountryGirl712

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    Sports fan fics aren't really my thing, but I gave this a go and your writing style is great! You keep the reader intrigued. I hope Mel is okay. Great layout, description, grammar... Can't really see anything wrong with it. Keep writing!
    October 4th, 2013 at 10:09pm
  • ironically1234

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    I've never actually read a hockey fan fic, not that I normally look for them, but still it's original and I like that. You have a great writing style. I didn't see any grammar or spelling mistakes. I can't think of anything to criticize. Great job!
    July 4th, 2013 at 12:52am
  • Sidn3y Crosby

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    I LOVE this story! I hope you update again soon!
    June 26th, 2013 at 08:07am
  • TaraLynn

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    So glad that Mel was able to go home and got to spend some quality time with her two favorite guys. I really like where you're going with this. Great chapter!
    January 29th, 2013 at 01:21am
  • Kaly18

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    Just found this story and I LOVE it! I almost got scared off by the three languages for the chapter numbers but I am so happy I clicked. Hooked from chapter 1!
    January 20th, 2013 at 04:07am
  • TaraLynn

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    Such drama! Poor Mel, I'm glad she woke up and hopefully everything goes well with her recovery. I'm still loving this story. Looking forward to seeing what happens next!
    January 9th, 2013 at 01:56am
  • Kenarik

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    Oh man and I thought ALEKS got branded... LOL I loved it, especially the polyvore outfits.
    January 7th, 2013 at 07:55am
  • NMT82

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    Oh no poor Mel, that is so sad. Glad she woke up! Such a great story.
    January 6th, 2013 at 02:00pm
  • AshleyVC88

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    @ bublbabie
    I'm going to do my best to get a few chapters churned out this weekend so I don't have as long of breaks in between updates. Sorry for taking so long and thanks for sticking with me! <3
    January 2nd, 2013 at 07:46am
  • AshleyVC88

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    @ Kenarik
    Being an overachiever isn't a bad thing. I'm a chronic underachiever apparently. Lol
    January 2nd, 2013 at 07:45am
  • Kenarik

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    OH I love the twists and turns we give our stories... I hope that what/whom ever hit them gets the book thrown at them! Hopefully your spark will come back and we won't have to wait too long for an update. I know I'm an overachiever.
    January 2nd, 2013 at 07:44am
  • bublbabie

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    Oh NO!!!!!!! I hope they are both okay. Great to finally have an update for this story. I have missed it. I hope you update again soon and don't leave us hanging for too long with that ending.
    January 2nd, 2013 at 06:55am
  • Arabella-

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    So I'm not at all a fan of hockey, and so I was slightly worried when Comment Swap sent me here. The thing that really got me to read was the fact that it's for the Blackhawks, which happens to be one of the few teams I actually know (they're my dad's favourite team!). But as for the story, I only read the first chapter, and from what I read it was good. Well written, good grammar, the works.
    November 20th, 2012 at 03:40pm
  • AshleyVC88

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    @ Kenarik
    Thanks Love! :-)
    October 25th, 2012 at 02:57pm
  • Kenarik

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    Woman this is awesome! You're doing a great job with this! Of course NOW you have to comment on MY stuff too cause Love goes both ways. If I didn't know you, I'd say you were a HUGE Hawks fan. THAT'S How good a job you're doing.
    October 25th, 2012 at 02:15am
  • TaraLynn

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    Hi! I've been meaning to read this before now, but I finally did get a chance to read through the entire story so far, and I must say that I am really enjoying it. I don't typically read fan fiction (and especially not hockey fan fiction), but I really think you have a great story here.

    I love the concept behind the story and I'm enjoying that Jonathan and Melania are trying to work things out in a difficult situation. I think you are a very good writer and I hope you continue with this. I would love to see where it goes.
    October 14th, 2012 at 05:40pm
  • crooked teeth.

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    I hope it's not mean to say but i really didn't want to read this at first because I don't read hokey fanfics but, i have to say the story was really interesting and the layout is really cool too. did you make it? I would say just add a little more details...and thats about it

    You're a really good writer. Good luck on your story!
    June 26th, 2012 at 01:32am
  • DancesWithSugarCubes

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    I have to be honest with you because that is what I look for from my own commentors. I was really confused reading this. I think that if perhaps you explained things in a bit more detail it would help makes everything more clear. I do like your style though. It's clean and to the point, I just feel that just being a tad more precise with the words that you use would work wonderfully :) Of course these are just my opinions so feel free to take them as you will :D

    One more thing. I would be careful about putting links within your actually story as opposed to in the author's note because it is technically against the rules and you can get reported for it. So just a heads up ;]
    June 25th, 2012 at 08:31am
  • The.Nub.Nub

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    Amazing writing skills, easy to read and understand, great plot and it’s interesting and doesn’t bore me, which isn’t a easy thing to do. You’re awesomely talented I just sat here and kept reading, it beats doing math :P can’t wait to read more
    June 20th, 2012 at 06:21am