Ana - Comments

Oh wow, originally when the comment swapper pulled up you story I didn't really want to read it. I thought the story wouldn't be my style and I've never liked things that are too real. I read books to escape the world. But, and I'm so happy I get to say this, I'm absolutely loving your story. Your writing style is flawless and your characters are relatable. I absolutely love how you made anorexia into an actual character - one I love to hate. I may have gone into the story dragging my feet, but after the first couple of chapters I found myself reading faster and flipping through the chapters faster. You had me hanging on your every word. And the characters and their actions would make me feel uncomfortable at times, because of how strong the emotions were in your writing. While reading, I was also thinking, and it makes me sad to think about how a lot of times you can't tell whens someone is having troubles. As far as I know, I've never knew anyone that had an eating disorder in the sense of never eating or puking it back up,but I do have a cousin that does nothing but eat. When she's depressed? She eats. When she's stressed? She eats. She eats her feelings away. And this has made me wonder if it's the same thing in a way - if there's that voice in the back of her head telling her to eat. I'm going to end this comment before it gets any larger, and I am just at a lost for words for your story anyways. This has made me feel so many things in such a short period of time of just reading a story. Thank you for writing this.

This is such an eye opening story, as well as heartbreaking! I have a friend struggling with that right now and it's hard to know what she is going through so this helps a lot. You have such beautiful writing and I was hooked right away, feeling the pain and wanting to yell at the bullies, or be there to help you out. I hope anyone who reads this will remember to never bully but help if they see any signs and I hope you are feelings better and or getting there at least :) Lovely story!

Okay so I can see you wrote this a while ago but I hope you will appreciate my critique (I'm from comment swap). I got up to chapter 25, I plan to read more when I get home because this is simply divine. You're writing is quite flawless, I really love your style. I love how the chapters are quite short, it just works and make you wants to read more and more and more. Honestly you had me hooked after the second chapter. I've never read a story quite like this, I love how you go from one character to another and include the 'character' of anorexia. Really really smart and beautifully written, well done.

This is heartbreaking. I really like how you go into the heart of it all, though. Is this truly what it is like for someone with anorexia? You stated that you once were, so I appreciate that you are letting your readers have a glimpse of what it feels like to have such a terrifying illness. I'm glad you pulled through it. This is really good. It is also really horrifying, I feel bad for anyone who has or had to go through this. I hope that, in reading this, others recognize if they have similar traits so they can seek help. I'm proud of you for being strong enough to write this. Well done. <3

Positively breathtaking. Like...holy crap.

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This was so hauntingly beautiful. There were points where I was actually near tears. Your writing style is so unique and wonderful, I couldn't stop reading even if I wanted to.
Your message was absolutely perfect. You got your points across and I'm so glad you wrote this. People need more stories like this. That don't glorify horrible illnesses.
I also want to thank you for sharing your story with us. I want to thank you for fighting. I want to thank you for surviving. This story is an inspiration.

I read it and I couldn't help but to notice it makes me have more self respect for myself. And maybe even though I'm a size 12 and my husband says everyday I am beautiful that maybe I am really just beautiful even if it's in my own way. It makes me smile this story although it took a long time to read it truest is an inspiration to woman and also men.
So I thank you.
You've made someone smile today :)

Also it was kind of you to have the warning there so you didn't make someone upset that's nice of you. Keep up the good work and if it's ok with you i would like to save your story as I know one of my cousins friends is actually struggling with her eating as we speak and it's horrible to watch her change

Hi, I'm sure that this is a fantastic story and judging by the comments, especially the one below me it seems as though it is. But I just CAN'T read stories about anorexia/self-harm/depression. It's nothing personal and I'm not going to say why because it will seriously offend everyone out there who feels that they are suffering from these difficulties. Again, I'm very sorry I'm sure it's really well written it's just really not my type of story. Sorry

Oh my goodness. I'm here from the comment swap. I saw how many chapters there were and said that I'd only read until about 5 so I could get a good feel of the story. The way you wrote it though.. It just captivated me. I read the whole thing. I just couldn't stop. It was beautiful. It also made me feel like I wasn't as alone as I thought I was. I walk around with that voice in my head saying that I'm not good enough. This story couldn't have come at a better time for me... While you said it may be a trigger, I think it's the opposite for me. So thank you for that

But onto your writing again.. I don't know what it is, but you just have an enchanting way of writing. Oh my goodness. You know when you read a really good book and you just don't wanna put it down? That is exactly how I felt. I usually say, "Maybe make your chapters a little longer." But with this? It just doesn't work. Making the chapters longer would, more or less, ruin the magic behind this.

I can't even.. Just. Ah. I'm sorry that this is sort of long and obnoxious and you really don't have any constructive criticism.. But I really can't think of anything that is wrong with this story. I feel like it should be published and be made mandatory for high school health classes. This story should be up there with some of the greats in reading. Congratulations on a truly wonderful story.

@ ironi1234
Thank you so much!!

This is just so amazing. I'm speechless. I had a eating disorder and you managed to describe it so amazingly well. I loved how you made ana a different character and the way you described her.

You wrote this beautifully and perfectly, and the perfect touch on top was having Ana as her own separate character. Having dealt with anorexia before, I can say that she was the best spot on character -- for she really is the vicious bitch in the back of your head telling you all those little things you know, but don't want to know.

@ Claire_123
Thank you for reading!

Wow.... This is amazing. I came to this story intending to read a few chapters then subscribe to remember to read the rest but I couldn't stop, I read the whole thing in one go... It's beautiful. Thank you.

Okay really! This is such a beautiful story! I loved how each chapter was written in other's people's points of view. The way that the voice talks though, it's a bit comical, and scary. I've never really read anything like this, and quiet frankly I'm glad comment swap brought me here.

You are pretty much flaw-free darling. Even if I saw mistakes anywhere I wouldn't care. This story just gets you wrapped up in it's clutches. Great story, great writing, and you've been recommended.

Very sad and tragic but very beautifully written. I really like how each chapter isn't like a traditional story in the way it's put together but more like a poem with stanzas and verses. Very unique and interesting to read just of the sake of its construction. How well you write makes it even better!

@ alison.wonderland
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@ Electra Heart
Thank you so much for reading. Your comment really means a lot. I hope that you're successful in beating this vicious disease, and if you ever need to talk feel free to messag me at any time and I'll get back to you as soon as I can. Stay strong, beautiful. <3

This story is so beautiful. I think it captures the disease. I've struggled with ana for over 10 years. I loved that you added that bit about control, because that is what Ana is. She makes you think you're in control but in actuality Ana is.

I came across this because of the review on the homepage. I was reading another story about anorexia on another site I was a member of before it shut down, but the story was never finished. Regardless, I expected something similar of your story, but I got something quite different.

The other story had long, detailed chapters, but I think your way - short chapters, sometimes almost like verses - worked so much better. And I think it really did help that you were using this as a way to vent, that you were talking from personal experience, because it gave an insight that nobody else would ever have been able to give a reader.

There was a chapter in which Cassie said something along the lines of, "I love being in control." It just made me stop and think, wow. Here's this girl, so far gone, but she thinks she's in complete control. It shocked me more than I expected, and that was what made it so utterly perfect.

And I do love the ending, because I love when things go in circles like that. And the whole time I was reading I just couldn't see there being a happy ending, so this was great to see. Not only did you show how much a best friend can be blissfully ignorant, not intentionally, but how much something like that can affect them mentally.

This was just...amazing. I'm so glad that I was able to read it.

I'll probably read the sequel pretty soon. But I just needed to comment here first, and now give myself some time to go away and really think about what I read.

Thank you for sharing this with everybody. I hope you stay strong.