June 25th, 2018 at 07:47pm
Comment Swap. So, I'll preface this by admitting that I am not typically a fan of werewolf stories, but I enjoyed some of the choices you've made with your main character. First, I really enjoyed the decision to make her mute, it adds a layer of difficulty and draws more attention to the wolven connection and the ability to communicate beyond mere words. I thought that was a nice touch. Second, I really enjoy the use of the collective "we" narration with the wolf spirit and Ally, it's so rare that this narration is applicable and well used and I think you've accomplished that. In fact, I'd love more of it. The multiple voices and points of view make the read more compelling and dynamic, which I appreciate as a reader. Also, I've got a soft spot for characters that talk to themselves, whether sane or insane.
Anyway, I think this story is promising and off to a great start (clearly people like it), and I just hope that there might be some backstory or conversation that might explain information that seems important, but has been underdeveloped thus far.
Thank you so much for your advice. It's been awhile since I touched this story, and it has renewed my inspiration.