Imprinting Just Isn't for Me - Comments

  • butterflywings16

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    @ greekfreak 77
    Thank you so much for your advice. It's been awhile since I touched this story, and it has renewed my inspiration.
    June 25th, 2018 at 07:47pm
  • greekfreak 77

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    Comment Swap. So, I'll preface this by admitting that I am not typically a fan of werewolf stories, but I enjoyed some of the choices you've made with your main character. First, I really enjoyed the decision to make her mute, it adds a layer of difficulty and draws more attention to the wolven connection and the ability to communicate beyond mere words. I thought that was a nice touch. Second, I really enjoy the use of the collective "we" narration with the wolf spirit and Ally, it's so rare that this narration is applicable and well used and I think you've accomplished that. In fact, I'd love more of it. The multiple voices and points of view make the read more compelling and dynamic, which I appreciate as a reader. Also, I've got a soft spot for characters that talk to themselves, whether sane or insane.

    Anyway, I think this story is promising and off to a great start (clearly people like it), and I just hope that there might be some backstory or conversation that might explain information that seems important, but has been underdeveloped thus far.
    June 23rd, 2018 at 11:56am
  • say your prayers

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    So, I really am the worst butt about following through with obligations and for that I apologize. I should have dealt with this comment swap thing....oh boy...forever ago. I'm sincerely sorry.

    For all that wait though, I wish I had something worth saying! You are a fantastic author.

    The blunt voice of the main character is equal parts refreshing and hindering. Because she's so blunt you have an issue of telling us what has happened, what is happening etc, rather than showing us. Not much emotion is conveyed, rather we infer what emotions she must be feeling about the given situations based on our own understanding of what emotions those situations typically bring out. The rape thing, for example.

    Other than that though, this is equal parts dramatic and funny. I really love her voice, especially the parts where she's talking to herself. That feels very natural and it's not something you see very often. It's something very light to balance out the other themes and I like it.

    This story is very original too, I don't know if you plan on continuing but if you do- that'd be nice.
    August 28th, 2016 at 03:27pm
  • Nisha-Shate

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    So I really do love this story. Its so unique and unexpected. You're very talented and captures the characters personalities perfectly. Im a big werewolf vampire witch and all the other things fans. Please update soon. Jusr found this and I'm addicted. Great job.
    September 19th, 2014 at 10:48am
  • Snapback-Princess

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    Comment swap! This was really good and very different to anything I would usually read. Ally's character is portrayed fantastically in all 6 chapters so far and her relationship with Drew has the potential to be very interesting. Where did you get the inspiration for this? The whole 'werewolf/vampire' thing screams Twilight but you write with such conviction that I'm under the impression it's a very original idea... Keep it up!
    March 31st, 2013 at 12:43am
  • BlueEyedAngel2

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    Still loving it!!!!
    October 14th, 2012 at 04:08pm
  • ChristianAngel01

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    ohh whoa this is getting intense!
    October 11th, 2012 at 01:15am
  • BlueEyedAngel2

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    I love this story more plz
    October 10th, 2012 at 07:55pm
  • Nisha-Shate

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    your story is absobloodylutey amazing, mate. i enjoyed it a lot.
    September 27th, 2012 at 04:29pm
  • Smokestoburn

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    Okay hi, I know I comment on this so many times since mibba told me that I haven't done it yet so in order for me to proceed into the next story I have to comment swap I need to make sure that I comment on this, which I did but mibba didn't detect it. So yeah, awesome story though.
    September 11th, 2012 at 07:17pm
  • Smokestoburn

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    Comment swapppp, okay wow, first of all I did not see this coming. It was.......weird? Idk, I'm not really into this story, but from all the comment you got it must be good. Yay!
    September 11th, 2012 at 05:10pm
  • Smokestoburn

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    Comment swapppp, okay wow, first of all I did not see this coming. It was.......weird? Idk, I'm not really into this story, but from all the comment you got it must be good. Yay!
    September 11th, 2012 at 05:10pm
  • Smokestoburn

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    Comment swapppp, okay wow, first of all I did not see this coming. It was.......weird? Idk, I'm not really into this story, but from all the comment you got it must be good. So keep it up!
    September 11th, 2012 at 04:41pm
  • Smokestoburn

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    Comment swapppp, okay wow, first of all I did not see this coming. It was.......weird? Idk, I'm not really into this story, but from all the comment you got it must be good. So keep it up!!! (:
    September 11th, 2012 at 04:40pm
  • Pianosfilledwithfire

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    I never know what to expect when delving into a new story. I tend to restrain myself from high hopes as, while many stories I read are good, if not great, they tend to leave me with either a sour taste in my mouth or me wanting more.

    This though, this really was a good read. The topic of sexual abuse is always such a rough topic but I felt that you used it in a good manner. I saw a comment that mentioned that is "more of a shock tactic than anything else" i must politely disagree. It may be because i always believe that the author has the right to do what they want. Regardless, this was a terrific read! Great job!
    August 12th, 2012 at 07:14am
  • zackystheman4me

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    wow... I don't really know what to say... I'm s speechless... this is amazing and don't worry about haters because the better writer you are the more you're going to have.
    June 27th, 2012 at 08:11am
  • chasingstars;

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    I'm kind of worried that you seem to be using the sexual abuse here as more of a shock tactic than anything else. There's a definite cliche in online fiction regarding abusive parents, and I feel kind of weird about how you're writing this one. While there are signs of fear here, and anger too, I feel like this is really downplaying the trauma and mental destruction a person goes through when faced not only with rape, but with forced incest. Maybe this is because you don't use a lot of description about what your protagonist is feeling, and therefore it seems as though you're coming across as nonchalant? I don't know, but it feels very cold and mechanical, considering what you're writing about. And do tie in a romance story right after dealing with horrifying sexual assault ... I don't know, man, maybe it's just me, but this feels really weird.
    June 27th, 2012 at 07:08am
  • bless

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    I first thought that this would be very cliche, and poorly written but you have proved me wrong. I enjoy how you actually lead into the story, and told us about the abusive father, and not just I ran away, found my mate, la la la. It is realistic, well as realistic as possible considering it deals with wolves, and I enjoyed reading your story.
    June 10th, 2012 at 11:43pm
  • dilliangergirl

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    Love the story! Don't quit!
    June 10th, 2012 at 07:54pm
  • dilliangergirl

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    Love the story! Don't quit!
    June 10th, 2012 at 07:54pm