Imprinting Just Isn't for Me - Comments

Love it , I like the personality of the characters

I like the story so far, Unknown the spirit wolf seems pretty awesome xD

personally, i've gotten sick of paranormal romance mainly because its become so predictable and cliche. however, i like your story and love the layout. there are a few grammatical errors but the writing itself is great the plot is also pretty good, good job

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I like your take on a paranormal romance, I read a lot of it but I don't really write it, my only romance is my story Safety, and it's poorly written.
Comment swap brought me here, and I wasn't sure I'd like it when I read the summary, but I ended up enjoying it. Though, I spotted a few mistakes here and there, but I make mistakes too, a lot, actually.
So that was my comment. Thanks for giving me a good story.

PS.
Good layout. C:

I like your take on a paranormal romance, I read a lot of it but I don't really write it, my only romance is my story Safety, and it's poorly written.
Comment swap brought me here, and I wasn't sure I'd like it when I read the summary, but I ended up enjoying it. Though, I spotted a few mistakes here and there, but I make mistakes too, a lot, actually.
So that was my comment. Thanks for giving me a good story.

PS.
Good layout. C:

Okay, so, you asked me to read this and tell you what everyone's freaking out over. There's really nothing wrong with this story, severely. It's actually very well written, and I envy you for that. There are a few mistakes here and there, but nothing too serious. If you want (as your co-author of Al and Mel) I could edit those out for you, since they're really nothing that bad. Just a few tense changes, a couple run-ons, and the occasionally misspelling that everyone makes sometime or another.

I read the first chapter of this story and had to stop reading. You have a great thing going, and I'm kind of glad that you're going away from Twilight, but you need to reread your writing and edit everything. Watch punctuation and grammar, and make sure you're splitting up your run-on sentences. Watch for typos as well, and just make sure your writing flows. As I said, you have a great story, but you need to make sure everything is properly written or your story could be reported and/or removed from Mibba by officials.

hey!! well, i have to admitt, i didn't want to read this at first because i thought it was twilight related. hahaha but as i started to read it, I really liked the idea. I just have a few suggestions, maybe re-reading your writing will help you with the errors you have throughout the chapters (though it's nothing too bad). and also, maybe if you give some more description to things? and give more time to the evolution of the story, sometime it seems like you're kinda rushing through the story. Besides that, I like the layout, the wolf is just precious :P and I really like the Ally vs Unknown thoughts :P it's kinda funny (in a good way of course) other than that, I hope to see more of this soon :D

This is a great story, not what I expected since the title contained 'Imprinting' I thought Twilight and I cringed a little but... The plot is very interesting:) again the only complaint I have is the spelling errors. Keep going though!:)

Well, the plot is going a bit fast to be honest. I feel like there should have been more to the introduction scene between Ally and her new pack and when she was running from her dad. There are some questions that seem to pop up when I read this like: How did her mom die? and Why did the pack except her so easily?

What I like about your story is that it is about werewoloves : ) It might be cliche but werewolf stories are my weakness. I like the scene you wrote about Ally when she changed for the first time because of the way it happened. I also think it's neat that she and her wolf form are two different beings and that they can communicate with each other.

So because the comments now show up on the side I was reading the first one that will be below mine and I have to agree with that person (WishingOnFireflies). There are a few grammatical and spelling errors but they don’t take away from the story. I like it though, you were rather descriptive and it kept my interest! :)

It's both cliche and entirely not, which I find intriguing. I also agree with some of the other comments, there are a couple of errors spelling and grammar wise, but it's also a very good idea. Just keep working at it. Descriptions are really good, just reread what you've written and think about how other people might read it and interpret it too.

I have to say, I thought the same thing MRGF123 did when I first saw it. I was kinda scared it was a Jacob Black fanfic, but I started reading and I'm really happy with your plot. I do see some typos, but those happen to everyone. I like how your character resists her wolf side, and kinda argues with it. I do think you could have written more about her adjusting in between chapters 3 and 4, as opposed to a complete switch.
Overall, though, good story.

At first, honestly i was like 'oh no, one of these werewolf things im NOT into' but your summary won me over and i decided to give it a go. I though it was interesting and i like the was you describe the setting of your story and the attention to detail, thats the sign of a good writer :)

So, I thought this was really interesting and original. I agree with pretty much everything party. said. There are a few errors, so I suggest you proofread. And I think there needs to be more detail and connection with the characters — but from the first chapter, you did have me feeling sorry for Ally and the idea is very original. This story could actually go far, because you are genuinely a good writer. Keep writing!

There are some errors, but they aren't anything you can't fix. The overall idea is pretty good. You can go very far with an idea like this. The possibilities are really endless. So just make sure that you do take the story as far as you can. Good job!

i love it so please update again soon and try to be a little more descriptive as to what was going on, i felt like it was everywhere at once.
But i liked it, so please do update again soon!

•you have a few grammatical errors, but that's easy to fix.
•your summary sets a completely different mood from your actual story
•it's best to leave mystery, so maybe not as much description in the summary
•vague is your best friend
•description is your best friend
when you write, you write down point after point
but you have to spice it up
make the reader feel suspicious
worried
sad
happy
make them feel the emotions by adding words and inner thoughts from the character
readers want to become the character, and that's hard when they know nothing of the mind of the character.
Be more descriptive
people want to paint a picture in their head but it's hard when you don't tell them much at all. they have to create their own visual, it's easier to share your visual with them

just a few things I noticed :)
your writing really isnt that bad
that's just stuff I've learned that's really helped me improve on my writing

I really hope you take my advice!
it makes writing so much more fun

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