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At first I was thinking, why would I want to read about this? Then I decided to give it a try and it just so happens that I love it! The idea is extremely original and amazing! Each chapter just pulled me in and I couldn't stop reading, even if I had to go to bed. Which is what I plan to do after I hit submit! You are very talented and should keep up the good work! I really enjoyed reading what you have written so far and can't wait to find out what happens next. I honestly want to find out what happens because this is very interesting to me! Anyway, update soon and keep up the good work! I really enjoyed reading your writing!

Oh hey there! Comment swap!
The idea for this is rather original and different and the plot so far seems very appealing, at least to me. Although, your writing style, I found it a bit too simple. It's a matter of personal taste of course, but I'm used to reading things with complicated vocabulary and phrasing and this is just so simple. But don't get me wrong, sometimes the most beautiful things are the simplest. I saw a couple of mistakes, but all you need to is find a beta reader to make sure it doesn't happen again. Overall, beautiful story. Keep it up!

So I read chapter two, because I figured you were getting so much feed back on one and the last.
Anyway, wooooah.
I loved how you described the dreams... I was really getting into it, ya know? But then she just woke up! However, I'm assuming this is supposed to be a angel book and that Will is the angel... Other than his odd was of talking... He's just so... Human? I don't know :) I think it's a sweet book and that your descriptions are great! If there was a fault in your writing, I didn't find it because I was just so drawn in by the actual content.

"Comment Swap) thanks for the word count.
nicely readable. 'Just the guys'?
(Chapter1)not sure it's how I had pictured angles.
is it just that they are too down to earth, human?
the querl?
They act, the way I had expected out of humans(people), not angles, but then, who'm I to say what an angle is like?
I don't know, it just did not spark, and I did not really feel with the story.
I guess I should say that the text is good, expressive.
keeping me on my toes, but, that's just that, maybe I was hoping for more.
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it's not the length of the chapter. too much familiarity with people?
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there is this one room in the entire event, he rest was hastened past, missing details?

Your writing style is very simple and readable and you give details without distracting from the story, and that's always good. It's easy for a potential romance like theirs to become predictable, so character development is going to be more and more important to set them apart and keep them interesting. You're on the right track so far, so keep it up. Your story is interesting and I hope it continues.

perhaps its just my ipad being silly, but the layout isn'T showing up. I noticed some other commenting on how nice it was, hopefully its only me.

Well, the plot is definitely unique and I'm sure is going to have some interesting things involving the backstory in the summary, as well as the relationship between Elizabeth and William, and who I think they might be.

perhaps its just my ipad being silly, but the layout isn'T showing up. I noticed some other commenting on how nice it was, hopefully its only me.

Well, the plot is definitely unique and I'm sure is going to have some interesting things involving the backstory in the summary, as well as the relationship between Elizabeth and William, and who I think they might be.

I love the simplicity of the layout. I am fascinated with angel stories and I really do enjoy this one. Your word choice is fantastic. You're an excellent writer. The plot is excellent and I love the characters. I cannot wait to read more. Keep writing and keep up the good work!

Great chapter, I've been waiting for you to update. I cant wait to see what happens between the two. This is still one of the most unique strories I've ever read!

This way this story is, is amazing! Extremely descriptive and just full of detail. The words flowed really well; this is just a wonderful piece of work. Keep up the great writing! I look forward to reading more!

It’s an enjoyable read, but as I’m not into ‘angel’ fictions I didn’t really connect with this one. I did, however, like the layout – perhaps the writing could be a little brighter, after a while it got difficult to read – and I liked that it fitted the mood of your story. You’ve got an interesting writing style and I like that you took existing names and gave them a subtle twist.

Firstly, I love anything with angels so I liked the story even from the first chapter. It sounds very interesting and I don't get bored while reading it. That's a good sign. I love the plot a lot and you've done a great job until now when it comes to captivating the reader so I'm curious to see how the story will continue.

I like fantasy stories sometimes then sometimes I don't. I was hooked on this one as soon as I read the first chapter. It is very beautifully written. And the layout matches it well. As soon as I saw it I was like 'Yep. This is about to get interesting'. I already have my favorite character and everything! I'm glad I got sent to this story (: Please keep adding to this.

I LOVE this story. Completely original and compelling, I just wanted to read more.... I can't wait to find out more about Elizabeth and William (although I have my suspicions as to who they both are :)

Very well written and the plot just sucked me right in. You can add a subscriber to this one

Hm, funnily enough, I opened this story earlier today when I found the contest you entered it in, but I didn't read it and now I've received it in the Comment Swap. What a gem you have here.

I absolutely adore the plot you have going here. I love fantasy stories, so this is amazing. All of your details and descriptions flow so beautifully. I really don't have a single bad thing to say. I'm just wildly in love with this story, I swear. Like others said, I love Elizabeth's attitude and how William seems to deflect it. He is also such a sweetheart! I love it so much. I want more. If you had any mistakes, I didn't catch them. This is just flawless practically.

However, the only teeny bit of advice I have is to break up your paragraphs with double spacing to avoid a big block of text. (:

You, my dear, have an incredible story here. I really enjoyed it. I was a little iffy at first when I read the summary, but after reading the first two chapters, I am eyeball deep in this story. I can't wait for more.

I like the idea you have going. Its strong, and has meaning. I like Elizabeth's attitude and how William seems to deflect it. I love the way you describe everything and how everything seems to flow together.

You have definitely gained a subscriber to this story.

i'm not too into fantasy stories, but I can really see myself getting into this one. and onr thing I ABSOLUTELY love is the original names. it suits the setting of the story and I just love them so much. I'm really interested to read more, so keep up the good work.

Wow. You have a really great way of describing things! Your writing style is brilliant. I loved reading this, even though i was a little prejudice beforehand since i'm usually not a fan of these types of stories. But i was pleasantly surprised :)

I only read the first chapter, but I am SO excited to read more! I really love how you’ve captured my interest straight off the bat and have left me longing to read me. My only suggestion is to use double spacing as it makes the text a LOT easier to read (: Other than that it is EXTREMELY good, keep it up! *subscribed*

I loved the general idea of the story. I especially loved Micheal for some reason he reminds me of my boyfriend... is that bad? May I suggest that you would use double spacing. This is a new adventure, and I can't wait to read on.