Screwed - Comments

Love the layout. Comment swap brought me here. The way you describe the story is very excellent. The summary was long but very talented at it's finest. I seen no grammar errors or anything of the sort. I'm very sucked into how they talk back and forth from each other. Seems like Tanner is impatient lol. Keep up the good work! Hope this story is successful! :)

Ha! I knew it!
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hello,sent here from comment swap but am so glad I was! I really liked your story! Your story flowed easily and was nicely done,with no big grammar problems or anything. Right away I was pulled in from the summary which you did a great job with. You're a very talented writer,and I already subscribed,I can't wait to see what else you put out! :)

OMFG <3 UPDATE PLEASE OMFG.

squeeeeeeee! <3 I love this story so much already omfg. PLEASE SAY YOU'LL UPDATE. THEY'RE ADORABLE.

I like their banter. It's really cute and funny.
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I love this story, it's really cute. Your writing is very simple too, it makes it easy to understand. Thank the Lord you're not one of the people who describe literally every single thing about a passerby's left shoe. I can't wait for you to update this, because personally, I see very good things coming from this! :'D x

great story though ! (:

great story though ! (:

whoa , im really confused . Was tanner there or Tanner ? ahh , wow , im stupid -.-

Lol I love their witty banter.
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Comment swap. :) Just from reading the description, I thought this was going to be a hell of a lot darker than what it turned out to be. I do love the whole Spiderman/Iron Man thing, though - geeky and cute to the max. The medication thing though...that shit's scary. I've been in that situation (also with seizure/birth control medication) and it's pretty freaky what can happen. Not a fun thing, but it does make for a hell of a plot line. Tanner's character is pretty amusing, I must say. :) Nice job so far.

I read the summary and I thought it was very interesting. I read the four chapters and thought the way Josh and Angel met was cute. Tanner and Angels relationship was funny and cute. I love how there is a gay guy in the story and he's her room mate. I find the whole her taking meds, especially meds that seriously clash with each other very interesting. I felt like the summary really pulled me into the story. And I like how there is plenty of dialogue in the story, and definitely not too much thought from her. I thought it was good.

I found this disturbing...I'm not going to lie. That summay...whoa. Uh, yeah I found Tanner and the girls relationship very, abusive in a weird way. I mean I am not too sure what they are going for here. Is it really just playful and thats the way they are or what? I found the random Hollywood awaits #YOLO disruptive and very annoying. I did not see the purpose in having it in there other than to have it in there. I was a bit conmfused as to where she was, was she in the bathroom? It seemed like she jumped all over. THis story has potential, but it needs some serious tweaking.

This is for swap, so my comment only focuses on the first chapter. I really enjoyed the interactions between the characters, and I liked the fact that the dialogue never came across as being too stiff or forced. I could actually hear the conversation between them in my head, and I always love that quality in a story. That being said, I do wish that there would’ve been more of a balance between the amount of dialogue and the amount of description/narration in this piece. Also, there are a lot of grammatical errors in this piece, so I would highly suggest getting a beta to help you out with those since they aren’t that hard to fix. This was definitely a great read, and I wish you luck as you continue to work on it :)

I think she's pregnant ? I have no idea . But it has Joshy in it and your a great writer ! Can't wait to read more ! :D

Most original J Hutch story ever.
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Ahh this is so good! Write more pleeeease!

Who's this Michy Pinion you've dedicated the story too? ;)
I love it Ally. It's really good :)

omg this is so good. please write more. i am so in love its not even funny and there's only been three chapters. omg