Maybe... Michelle will decide she wants a kid of her own...
And then further in the story Bri gets distracted with that and Audrey feels..... Ya know(; Just a thought:p I LOVE IT WIFEY hahaha Or is it mom now? I'm lost... :)
O.O will this be like the movie The Game Plan with The Rock in it?!??!??!?!? i will fight you if it is. i want no deaths. at all. but great story so far. keep writing :D
Gotta say I enjoyed it. But I do have to wonder about Audrey.
I love Val in this story. lol. She's so awesome! And I hope Michelle is okay. I mean, she's initially going to be shocked, of course, but I hope she remembers that her issue is not with Audrey and doesn't treat her like crap. ^_^
Okay okay so... "Did you mom ever... find someone?your
This little girl knew too much than she should this just sounds weird to me. Maybe take out "too much" and make it "more".
You now your dad is gonna wanna know about this kind of sugar honey ice tea, Syn.know not now.
I really liked this. I LOVE that she went into the pet store. That's my favorite place. And I loved the whole black woman part. Can't wait for the next chappy of course :)
Ohhh she used the past tense on her mother! Meaning that she is keeping something from them because she was very eager to learn about her mother's past. Now it seems that Matt maybe upset because he had the tone when he spoke to Gates. Wow is Brian reallu considering on marrying Michelle'???? I know Aubrey will not like that woman! I can't wait for the next update!
OMG You should be getting more comments! This is amazing! I love it! Aubrey is intelligent for girl that's only twelve! With Brian freaking out that he finds out that he has a daughter, Aubrey is calm as hell! I can't wait for the next update!
Audrey is really mature for her age. And I love Brian's reaction. He is so torn and it's perfect. I REALLY love Jimmy's reaction. It's what I would expect from him. I really want to know what they fought about. It had to have been something serious so... I also love how Jimmy interacts with her. He's very cautious.
When Jimmy is asking Brian what he wants you say "fraternity" and you totally mean paternity.
And I really like how she freaks out about getting on the motorcycle. It's very realistic.
I thought I had cought a spelling mistake but I didn't copy it and I just reread it and didn't find it so...
Great update! (And this is a long comment haha. Thanks for the shout out!)
And then further in the story Bri gets distracted with that and Audrey feels..... Ya know(; Just a thought:p I LOVE IT WIFEY hahaha Or is it mom now? I'm lost...
:)