June 7th, 2012 at 04:33am
Can I just say how funny I find it that I got your story to read shortly after I read your blog about how to write good story comments. That’s a great coincidence if you ask me. Anyway, this is for the ‘comment’ swap.
I loved your summary, it can really draw someone into the story. It has sort of a mysterious aura about it. It can get someone interested in the story but also leaves them wondering what the story really entails. It’s an interesting summary for sure. Getting into the first chapter, your writing style is amazing. It’s beautiful, almost poetic in a way. That sounded weird, I don’t know how else to describe it though. You’ve got a really pretty writing style is what I’m trying to say. :3
Your story was pretty flawless in terms of errors, but I did find a sentence that didn’t really make sense to me and made me take a double take at what I was reading. It was this one:
“I’m not done my smoke yet.”
I’m pretty sure there should be a ‘with’ in that sentence.
Your story was really incredible, the whole chapter had an aura of mystery about it and that’s something that I really liked. Your story was a good read, I enjoyed it. Well done on the story. (:
Very detailed story, I loved it a lot.
I applaud you.