Payphone - Comments

The layout is really cute. I think you should put quotes around the words when it's her recording for her voicemail, but I'm not completely sure about that. A lot of your I's are not capitalized. It's a good plot though.

I really really like this! You have an incredible way with words, and I LOVE the name Adelaide, it’s so pretty. The only thing I can really complain about is that you didn’t put any quotation marks around Adelaide’s voice mail message thing. So maybe do that, because it was a bit confusing. But otherwise, really really good! Such a sweet story. I think a lot of people can probably connect with this, because of the whole completely-in-love-I'd-do-anything-for-you bit. I know I can. Good work!

I love it so much!!! It was adorable and heart-wrenching at the same time!! Absolutely fantastic, if I do say so myself! =D The content was super, the layout was inviting, and the summary drew me in completely! Excellent work! I saw that it was a one-shot, but you could still do so much with it! Anywho, I liked it a ton. Great Job!

I love this story! Now update so I can keep reading aha. Seriously though I don't think you should make us wait any longer....

I teared up, okay.
A bit of a cliche, but it was good to the point you forgot about it and just kept reading. I liked it, a lot.

This was really cute! :) I really liked it overall, though there were a few spelling/grammar mistakes that shouldn't be too hard to fix - just run it through a different spell check. And the ending was quite nice for a one shot, wasn't a complete 'happily ever after' but still left me with good feelings, which is always nice.

"Happily ever after had been so common then, it was like eating breakfast. And you never really remember what you ate for breakfast."
I really loved this line by the way, it was perfect. :)