Two Worlds Collide - Comments

I get excited everytime I see that you updated this story! I love it so much!
I think I practically smiled throughout the whole time I read this chapter.
Gabe was really freakin crabby for most of the chapter, it made me laugh. Melanie is just so carefree and I love the way she interacts with Gabe when he's acting all crabby. Most people try to stay away from crabby people, or they try not to get on their nerves, but Melanie just does the opposite.
And it's pretty freakin awesome. :D
I loved when Gabe just decided to grab all their stuff AND Melanie. I could totally see that in my head. If I would see that in an airport, I think I would have been laughing like crazy. Haha. :)
Thanks for the update. :) You're amazing!

It is hilarious to me how moody Gabe is. One minute he's grumbling and being a righteous grumpy-pants, next minute he's laughing and adorable, then before I know it he's back to being a grumpalump. I love it. I also love how she's just so innocent about getting him to have a good time. The image in my head of him juggling two suitcases, a backpack and Melanie is just priceless. Who cares if it's believable or not? It's still amazing. Another wonderful chapter! You're kind of my hero for bootlegging off of another hotel. Just saying. Hope you enjoy your vacation. <333

Oh my gosh! Gabe is such a sweetheart on the inside. He pretends to have such a tough, hard persona when he's really not that mean of a guy. I mean, what kind of tough guy tucks a girl into bed when she falls asleep? Huh? I loved that scene by the way. It was really cute.
I think it's interesting that Melanie wanted to go to a casino, but they're in Vegas, so why not?
I was seriously shocked when Melanie won the jackpot. At first I was thinking about the movie "What happens in Vegas" and I started thinking that something bad was going to happen... But nothing did, at least so far. I thought that Melanie was going to kiss Gabe on the lips... but no. That kind of wrecked my hopes of them getting together sometime soon. Haha. Oh well.
Thanks so much for the update! This story rocks my socks!

HE TUCKED HER IN! I just had to get that out. It was SO adorable, I literally squealed. Just a little bit. And everyone in the staff room at work looked at me like I was the biggest dweeb in all history of dweebs. And moving on. Also, I love the fact that he's totally fighting off crushing on Melanie. It's ridiculously awesome. The casino part was hilarious. I can't believe she won the jackpot!! She is super lucky, but I guess that's karma, right? Good things happen to good people. Generally speaking, anyway. Now she can buy him all the beer he wants hahhaha! I am enjoying this way too much. I hope you have internet where you're going for vacation but if not, I will look forward to another update <3

Las Vegas! I can't wait to go there one day. This story gets better with each chapter. Your writing is flawless, in my opinion. I love Gabe and Melanie! Favorite characters ever. They remind me of bickering siblings except...not. I am surprised she's only thirteen though. I assumed she was a bit older. I wonder if he knows how old she is. I'm sure he does. I hope it doesn't cause trouble later on though. Love this so much!!

Gabe and Melanie's banter is hilarious. Absolutely hilarious. Their fighting is cute and quirky... And it also reminds me of how an old couple would fight about stuff, but then make up two minutes later as if nothing happened. You can tell that they definitely have chemistry. I love that Melanie was thinking that Gabe was going to kiss her. That added to her personality and the fact that she had never left her yard for her whole life until now. It just gave me a sense that she is somewhat of a hopeless romantic. But the age difference seemed to put a downer on the idea that her and Gabe would end up together. I still hope that they will, even if they have a huge age gap. I don't think age should matter when it comes to relationships... but that's just me... Anyways...
Thanks for the update!!!

Super cute chapter! I like that this chapter was in Gabe's point of view. It helped create a little more clear view of his personality and his take on Melanie. I like that he is somewhat grouchy... It gives him a bit of character. Melanie seems very perky and care free, as well as fun. Both of their personalities clash and meld together in an almost perfect way. I was really doubting if Gabe was actually going to go back and help Melanie. I thought that Melanie would try to follow Gabe and convince him to take her, but Gabe was sweet enough to go back. :)
Thanks for the update! I'm loving this story so far!

How could this chapter possible turn me off? It was even more perfect than the first! I was a bit surprised, actually, when I realized it was in Gabe's point of view. But in a good way. I'm happy to have gotten a glimpse into what he's thinking, and I hope there will be more chapters of him. I adore Melanie. She's so adorable. I can't wait to read more!!

I don't think I could have ever come up with anything at all close to this story's concept. It's unique and different and funny so far, and I really like it. The premise isn't quite clear yet, considering it's just the first chapter, but I'm definitely interested in this story. I'm excited to see how Melanie reacts to other people and things outside of her hometown and her neighborhood. I'm also excited to get to know her personality, as well as Gabe's when he is sober. I also have a feeling that Gabe isn't going to be quite as cooperative with Melanie about going to New York when he's fully coherant. I am looking forward to the rest of this story. :)

Okay, number one, I love the whole concept of this. It's so different, absolutely not like anything I have ever read. I'm assuming that's what you were going for, so great job! Secondly, your writing is amazing. Realistic. And I absolutely love Gabe, he's a hilarious drunk and I can't wait to find out what he's like sober. I am so looking forward to reading more of this!!