Only Human - Comments

I love the layout, its simple but at the same time striking. When I first started reading I got so excited, I love stories or poems or whatever that personifies death. You are such a good writer, I don't know what the people who commented on mistakes were talking about I didn't see any, but I could have been too absorbed in the story to care. I love how its mysterious. You don't know how she hot in the ward and what exactly her problem is. I mean she could just be crazy and not realize it, and that's amazing to me!

I love the layout you chose for this story. The format you wrote in was great as well, and I enjoyed your style. I see some few minor mistakes, but I honestly don't see anything that takes away from your story. You have some amazing ideas and that was just shown by me reading the first chapter! It's a good start and really descriptive. You have a unique way of writing out typical situations and it just brings your writing to life! Great job, you had me at the first few sentences! I love when things come together in bits and pieces.

absolutely fantastic

This is fantastic writing! Your descriptions are amazing and the way you layout the story is refreshing. I love how you give us enough hints to guess what is going on accurately before you reveal the truth; and that is a gift. If I were to read this any other place, I would assume it was pages from a published novel. You have real talent and care for your work; I can't wait for the next chapter to see if my conclusions come true.

I absolutely love this! Your writing style is fantastic! I like the story line of this. I like how you described things enough but not too much especially. At first I was confused and then it all made sense, and I really love the picture at the beginning of the chapter/story. This is wonderfully written, keep it up!

This is beautifully written. I love your style, it's all so fluid and I love the darkness of it. I think you've used just the right amount of detail and have done wonderfully with character development. I struggle giving personality to third-person perspective but I think you're doing brilliantly so well done!

This was an amazing read I have thoroughly enjoyed! I especially LOVED the way you've described things without killing it. Without OVER describing it. I also like how there are all of these people that you feel attached to even though you don't know their names. Like the man that jumped in after her or the other man who cared for her. And I also loved your sentence structure. Great~ I loved it~

This is really interesting. It confused me a little at first, but I just went with the flow and found out what was going on, or at least what I thought was. Your writing is really good! And I especially liked how death played a part in the first part of your story!

So, what first caught my attention was the picture. I like it a lot. Also, I love, love, LOVE your writing style. I absolutely adore how you capture the main idea of the story and suck in the reader with your elequant paragraphs. As far as your visuale aid and sentence structure goes, it's wonderful. I only found a few grammar mistakes here, but I don't mind. I'll definitely be subscribing.

I love the pace of this story. I could feel the rush in the opening paragraphs.
There was one error I could find. The man states "you could of died". That should be you could have died. Also, bloodstream is one word.
Also, when you say sixteen millimeters of sedation, do you mean sixteen milliliters?

I like how much detail you added into this short story but not enough for it to be overwhelming. It was really interesting. I liked how you personified Death and made it, it's own character. It reminds me of a book (The Book Thief). It was a very well thought out piece and very well written. I like it.

I really liked this short story it's something different. The way you made the words flow made the story very addicting. i loved the detail to it and how it seems as if there is many layers to the the story. I love how the layout looks as well. It's simple but goes with the story.

Oh, and my birthday is August 15th! :D

Well, that was intense. This is definitely written extremely well, better than most stories that I've read on this site in a while. I really enjoy the simplicity of the layout, I'm glad you didn't go with anything that would pull attention. With that though, I would somewhat suggest making the font a tiny bit bigger, but that isn't really a problem. I'm probably just too tired to manage small fonts.
Really amazing, though. Great descriptions.

Comment Swap brought me to read your story, and I'm happy it did so. I like how you elaborately lay out the plot, and only in one chapter. it was simply amazing. I can't wait until you finish this, when you do, I'll freak. I Also, I like the summary, it's short but interesting. It really pulled me in to read.

Gah! I enjoyed reading this story, a great break from all of the romances I read. It was well-written and I really loved the personification of death. This story is truly great, and I wish you luck on the contest.

By the way, you wrote "Death still sat in the passenger feet..." and I think you meant seat?

holy shit. what an opening paragraph. and i can't even imagine what's driven her to this. your descriptions- the choppy sentences work well, you can hear a narrator reading them to you and it's in one of those 'yep, this is happening, yeah, what of it' tones and it works so well.

the following scene is brilliant. i love how she's so sure of herself, that she's not insane and she knows what's going on, but then it's so clear that she's not in control no matter how much she thinks she is.

beautiful piece.

Wow. That story was amazing, I haven't read something that well written in a long time. Nixie Edward's feelings make you want to read more just so that you can find out why she feels the way that she does.

I believe you have an amazing chance at winning the contest you are entered in. This is magnificent.

Oh my goodness. This is one of the best stories I've ever read on here, and that's saying something considering I usually read fan-fiction. This story is so captivation, and I could really imagine everything you were describing. One of the only thing I could think about was how frustrating it would be to be in Nixie Edwards' position!

I like this. It was written rather well. I have always enjoyed reading things about people who aren’t always there. I like your choice in wording. It flows nicely. Very descriptive. I like how you added death like it was a real person. Overall this is a good story. I like it. Good job!