Some Days - Comments

I think you should seperate the dialogues, along with spaces.
I like All Time Low pretty good, but I couldn't focus very well on this because of there being no spacing and the words being so small.
Plus, I'm guessing you haven't updated in a while.

So, my comment really is of no use. But I hope you are doing well and are still writing. c:

Comment swap bought me here, the layout is really pretty but there are very few gaps, where your paragraphs end, this can be off putting to readers.

Love the ending of the chapter, cliffhanger, makes me want to know what happends next.

Comment swap brought me here, and so I'm not much of a fan of All Time Low.

It was really hard to get through the chapter because it was very hard to read since there's no spacing between the dialogue, which can actually be fixed quite easily though, so no worries!

The layout is very pretty, and seems to match the mood of the story.

As for the story itself, it sounds promising, and well, it keeps us wondering about Alex, and Carolina.

Keep up the good work !
:)

The bad first: I'm going to go with everyone else on this. You definitely need more spacing in the paragraphs because it's difficult to read. You also, however, I noticed tended to slip up with pronouns.
For example:
"'If you'll sign here--' Ms.Anderson began the speech she said to every new person. Alex rolled his eyes again,propping his elbow onto the counter,not looking and accidently knocking down the little holder of pens and pencils. All the workers whipped their heads around,while Alex dropped to his knees,quickly trying to pick up his mess.
'You're worthless!' He screamed at Alex"

Who is he? Ms. Anderson? Because she's a woman. The "workers" is plural, so, that would be 'they' or 'one of them'. Was Alex screaming at himself? There needs to be a clearer indication of that.
In that case it would be perfectly acceptable to say "Alex screamed at himself," or "Alex screamed at Alex." Just because it's so unusual and intriguing.

At first I felt you'd broken Alex down too soon, so shortly after being introduced it was indicated that he was a silent, loner, reserved type--- but conveniently shot that away just to go see who the new arrival was. However, from that, the rest of this chapter was very decent and reaffirmed that he hadn't broken character- he'd simply reacted like a human.

Now for the good:
You're dialogue and description is -excellent-. Never once did I ask what any of them looked like, but that's because I didn't really need to. I was so caught up in the world around them that I just put my own face to them. This being said, you gave me just enough to go on to make a good picture of them- without going overboard.

(Can we say "I went to the mirror to look at myself: *describe photograph*"?)

A lot happened, but it was a very smooth line through, and I never once had to take a breather to take it all in.

You left just enough questions unanswered to make your reader want to continue on- just to find them out. For example, I wondered, "What's wrong with Micci?"
And perhaps most impressive is, you didn't show mercy and even give us a hint! We're still left wondering, "Who is Micci? What is she in for? Why does she need to be avoided?"
And I like that. A lot. Kudos. Ultra kudos. Not many have the ability to just leave you hanging that way. That was the perfect cliffhanger because you didn't have to stop the chapter at a '...' just to keep us going.

I can't tell you how many times I've read, "We opened the door, and were shocked at what we saw! It was......*end of chapter*"

Honestly, this story is good enough to stand on it's own as an original fiction. You didn't need Alex Gaskarth, because I hardly noticed his presence anyway. To me Alex was just a main character who happened to be named Alex.

The ultimate advice, I suppose, you really need, though...is spacing between paragraphs. This is not a novel, it's a computer. It's much harder to read everything bunched together like that.

<3<3<3<3 Thank you, for such a wonderful story, I look forward to more.

Hey, so I am a little confused but I'm sure that will clear up once you post some more chapters. It is flowing nicely and there were no spelling errors that I saw. You might want to try spacing out the paragraphs a little. They are so close that it makes the story hard to read especially with the small print. Keep up the good work and I can't wait to read more:)

I really love the layout for the story, its very cute/ pretty.

But for me this story was slightly hard to read which made it kind of confusing. But I did find it to be a very good story, and I do wish that you would update again; write some more please. It is very good and I wish to read more :)

Good job !!! :D

I really love this layout! It is so pretty.
I don't know why, but I've never been a fan of stories that take characters and make them into something they are not. I feel like the story didn't have anything to do with Alex Gaskarth and you just made him the main character because you didn't want him to be an original character. But, that's just my opinion!
I think you're a very good writer though, and I hope you continue writing!

I found this story quite hard to read. a suggestion would be to make the font a little larger so it doesn't make the reader re-read the same line a few times...as well, maybe try to space the paragraphs apart. Over all though it wasn't bad.....comment swap brought me here, it is not a story i would have looked for ahaha good job though

I never got into All Time Low enough to really know who's who, but I'm going to keep reading this and give it a shot. I couldn't stop reading it. There are quite a few grammatical errors though, and some of them make the story confusing. Also, when going into a flashback, can you somehow let us know? That completely threw me off. A lot of authors use Italics for flashbacks or they just type flashback before it and end flashback at the end. Just some suggestions.

i really like this beginning! i usually read hockey stories so this is a little out of my comfort zone but i did enjoy it! i also really love the layout! its very cute and a nice layout always makes reading more enjoyable for me

Not gonna lie, I saw the size of the first chapter and almost freaked out. Which, in my book, is a very positive thing. Long chapters are usually the best for me, showing me that you actually care about the stort - the details, the characters, the plot line. I'm very thrilled about this story and I love the interaction between Alex and Carolina. I'm also very excited to see as to why Alex told Carolina not to associate herself with Micci and the others. This story is by far one of the greatest stories I've ever read - on Mibba and in general. Keep up the great work! c:

Some of the other comments mention the characters being dissimilar to their real selves, but since I have no prior knowledge to who anyone in this is, it reads like any other story. I happen to enjoy the way this reads, but it might be helpful to space it out a little more and make the font bigger. Your layout is lovely and so is your writing style, and I like the characters' personalities. The note pad writing pulled me in, the imagery was perfect for it. Really good job with this, keep it up!

I really like this layout as well but i feel like your font was too small i had to squint to read some of it and the paragraphs were too close for my eyes. I don't have bad vision or anything. What i was able to read it was a very good story and i can't wait to read more!

I really love this layout! It is so pretty.
I don't know why, but I've never been a fan of stories that take characters and make them into something they are not. I feel like the story didn't have anything to do with Alex Gaskarth and you just made him the main character because you didn't want him to be an original character. But, that's just my opinion!
I think you're a very good writer though, and I hope you continue writing!

I really love this layout! It is so pretty.
I don't know why, but I've never been a fan of stories that take characters and make them into something they are not. I feel like the story didn't have anything to do with Alex Gaskarth and you just made him the main character because you didn't want him to be an original character. But, that's just my opinion!
I think you're a very good writer though, and I hope you continue writing!

I like the beginning, and it seems like it could be a good plot line. Your writing has a nice style and it flows nicely throughout the chapter. The one thing I could say is that the lack of paragraph spacing makes it very difficult to read. The giant block of text can be very confusing and personally it makes my brain hurt. But if you just add in the paragraph spacing it would be a lot easier for people to read. If I'm remembering correctly that is a rule(?) on Mibba now, but don't quote me on that.

I love the storyline, and you do have a very nice flow to your writing. The part about the chair really had be chuckling. The only things I would recommend for constructive advice, is that you do a full research on Eating Disorders. There is a lot of recovery, therapy and maintenance involved in recovery, including personal, group, family, food and nutritional therapy. Not to mention eating six meals a day, with a set calculated meal plan that has a high calorie intake, to balance, and a whole range of medication to solve all formed mental disorders that have shown up along with an eating disorder. As a recovering anorexic, I feel this was underplayed. Besides that, I am defiantly subscribing and recommending. I didn't mean to teacher you, but I hope to read more soon!

words* not worlds... haha

words* not worlds... haha

Okay. The first two worlds 'Alex Gaskarth' got me excited, I freaking absolutely LOVE All Time Low, they are my favorite band. This is a very good idea. But in your chapter you should space out paragraphs and new ideas to make it a little bit easier to read. But other than that, it's lovely. Very good job, keep writing. Update soon!! Keep up the good work! :)