Infection - Comments

This story is really well written! The summary really did catch my eye with the title then description winding a kind of poem, it was really well thought out! The grammar, the language throughout out the whole things is near enough perfect and I definitely admire that, its usually hard to make every little detail perfect. I like the use of verbs and adjectives within the story, you managed to describe every little detail wonderfully without it being overdone. There was no over need to describe. I liked the simplicity of the chapters, its great how you've keep each chapter reasonably short as sometimes with chapters that are really long its hard to focus and keep reading every little detail. I loved the third person point of view in this story, the character's thoughts and feelings are clear throughout and I could imagine the scene in my head along with the emotion that character is portrayed to be feeling.

I love this story! and I'll definitely be subscribing! :)

This story is really well written! The summary really did catch my eye with the title then description winding a kind of poem, it was really well thought out! The grammar, the language throughout out the whole things is near enough perfect and I definitely admire that, its usually hard to make every little detail perfect. I like the use of verbs and adjectives within the story, you managed to describe every little detail wonderfully without it being overdone. There was no over need to describe. I liked the simplicity of the chapters, its great how you've keep each chapter reasonably short as sometimes with chapters that are really long its hard to focus and keep reading every little detail. I loved the third person point of view in this story, the character's thoughts and feelings are clear throughout and I could imagine the scene in my head along with the emotion that character is portrayed to be feeling.

I love this story! and I'll definitely be subscribing! :)

I must honestly say that the language is beautiful wonderfully poetic and deeply riveting. It even has like an air of suspense. Your story is very detailed without being overkill which is nice. Very good job.

The writing is, as some of the other comments have said, poetic. You're grammar is pretty much perfect, and you don't overdo any formatting.

However, I only have a hint of what's going on. I don't know anything about the character or the story as a whole, and I feel like I should at this point, even if the chapters are short. You give her best friend a name, but you don't give her or her abuser a name (if this story is, in fact, about sexual abuse).

All the same, you've pulled me in. I love reading stories like this (and writing them, as a matter of fact), and I love how you write in depth without feeling the need to give too many gory details. Your summary was amazing, and you've made it clear that she's going to do something about this man and I want to know what it is. This'll be the first story (I think) that I subscribe to from the comment swap feature.

I love this. the description is amazing. I love stories written in this tense and point of view it adds more suspense. Please, Please update soon I can't wait to read more! I can relate to the summary. That makes it a good story for me is when i can relate to certain parts or the character. Sorry about all the comments it said it wasn't posting but I'm not sure if it did. I do like how the chapters are short; it makes it not dragged out like many people do. It gets straight to the point but with good detail. Is chapter one kinda like a prologue? I noticed the narrator changed from chapter one to chapter two. The characters feelings are well portrayed. One suggestion would be to describe the character a little more in chapter one, for example her eyes. You could say what her eyes are speaking. Think of the quote, “You’re eyes are the windows to your soul,” I think that quote would apply to the character when describing her in more detail. Another suggestion is to give detail on her surrounding like the setting and where they are. It will give more feeling to the story. Finally, you could give a little detail at a time about what the character is thinking about. Again amazing job with details, good luck o and I am subscribing.

I love this. the description is amazing. I love stories written in this tense and point of view it adds more suspense. Please Please update soon I can't wait to read more!

You're writing is lovely and I like the summary. I'm too fond of these stories with such short chapters however. Comment swap brought me here but there's not a whole lot of writing to comment on so I dot have a ton to say. I don't see any errors. You're writing is very poetic and soothing though, and I do like the style of it. :) Have a wonderful day!

I like this! Can't wait to read more!!