Okay, I got goosebumps. This was incredibly written, I just adore how you actually used the lyrics from the song as well as integrating them into the actual prose of the fic. Really really well done. Just a note of improvement, try and re-read over your writing a couple of times before you submit or have a look for a beta to just check things over, there were a couple of grammatical errors and typos here and there but nothing too bad. I'm glad Mibba sent me over here because it's a great fic. Well done. ~Jack's Creativity
This was incredibly written, I just adore how you actually used the lyrics from the song as well as integrating them into the actual prose of the fic. Really really well done.
Just a note of improvement, try and re-read over your writing a couple of times before you submit or have a look for a beta to just check things over, there were a couple of grammatical errors and typos here and there but nothing too bad.
I'm glad Mibba sent me over here because it's a great fic. Well done.
~Jack's Creativity