Loverboy - Comments

This was such a great chapter! I love how you could read it as a comedy and Hennessey and Gemma’s relationship is so great, but you already know that! Also, Nathan is hilarious! Favorite part is Hennessey saying Nice butt to Nathan!

Nathan you dog! First, you agree with our Gemma that is would complicate things than you go full-on in for the kiss! Gemma my lady he is the one! If you were on a match backing show I think for sure you would give him the rose or well say your heart is with him. As always lovely, your writing is amazing! I can't wait to see what happens next!

I’m still going to say that my favorite part of the chapter is that this will be Sober Gemma’s problem! I’m so glad you are writing again! Your attention to detail is always great! Writing Gods thankful to have you back!

I'm here from Comment Swap, and I'm really sorry you had to put a note in asking comment swappers to not hate on The Wanted. That's just incredibly rude of them.
I looooove your layout, and the fact that the chapter titles are lyrics.

I adore the name Gemma, so I already like the character. I have to admire her hustle, from being a model to being an AM. I know the first chapter is used to set stuff up, but I really liked the flow of it. I didn't feel rushed through, or that it dragged out at all.

I laughed at Gemma calling Nathan "bro." It sounds like such an American thing to say. I do think she should've at least reminded the group about their early call, but that's just because I'm a worrywart.

The conversation between Nathan and Gemma was sweet. It's refreshing to see Gemma with a personality and not another Mary Sue. She seems to have insecurities, and I hope they show themselves.

For someone who loves boy bands as much as I do, you'd think I'd at least listen to The Wanted, other than the two singles I've heard. (I had to Google Nathan- you were not kidding about his eyebrows). That being said, you've convinced me to listen to them.

So far, I really like it. It's a quick read, but it keeps the interest going. Great great job!

double post!

I enjoy the vibe this story has. I'm usually very specific with fan-fictions. I've written a few myself and they are quite fun to write. I love the incredible details in this story and how everything flows nicely. By chapter four I got a sense of the personalities of the characters. I'm liking Jay and Gemma. I'm able to picture what is going on based on the descriptions you've given and it is quite pleasant. I don't have much time to keep on reading at the moment but I will definitely be back later to continue reading. Good work!

I enjoy the vibe this story has. I'm usually very specific with fan-fictions. I've written a few myself and they are quite fun to write. I love the incredible details in this story and how everything flows nicely. By chapter four I got a sense of the personalities of the characters. I'm liking Jay and Gemma. I'm able to picture what is going on based on the descriptions you've given and it is quite pleasant. I don't have much time to keep on reading at the moment but I will definitely be back later to continue reading. Good work!

Hiii (:
So, I've never read a The Wanted fic before, but I reckon if I had to, this would be it!
Your details are absolutely amazing and the plotline is so well thought out.
Your characters are so three demensional and it's crazy. They're so realistic its unbelievable

Keep up the awesome work and have a good day!! (:

I love the detail as everyone is congratulating you on. I will have to admit this was the first comment swap I have done and so unfairly I had no previous knowledge of who The Wanted was, though I did listen to some of their music while I read and have to say they are pretty good even with not being my taste. Gemma feels like an actual character with real personal feelings and is not a Mary Sue. I hope that makes sense as I realize it is not very clear, but I have no other way to word it. Though I like the detail you have written I wish there was more of it. I felt there was a lot of interaction between characters, but I will not push that too much since maybe it is my lack of understanding The Wanted. I love the flow of it all either way. It does not try to toss seven different plot lines and then not even tie the end of one. Your story plays through events. To be honest I would have defiantly subscribed to this story if it were a fanfic I was interested in. Keep up the good work and it was a joy to have your story as my first comment swap, as I was worried it was going to be something horrid. Good luck either future chapters/stories.

I have to agree with some previous comments. Your attention to detail is amazing. I love the sense of movement your writing has; chapters long enough to keep everything interesting an separate. I really like your writing style in general, I actually believe we have similar writing styles but I seem to struggle with length, something you shine in.

Keep it up! This is an awesome story, and I'm interested to see your other works!

To be honest I never really cared for The Wanted, but this story may have just changed my mind. It's very descriptive. An example of that would be this line. "Gemma couldn't talk, what with her 5'2" frame." The way you structure your paragraphs and sentences is amazing. It's definitely a "show not tell" story. This is a really cool story and I will definitely be reading it a lot more!

To be honest I never really cared for The Wanted, but this story may have just changed my mind. It's very descriptive. An example of that would be this line. "Gemma couldn't talk, what with her 5'2" frame." The way you structure your paragraphs and sentences is amazing. It's definitely a "show not tell" story. This is a really cool story and I will definitely be reading it a lot more!

To be honest I never really cared for The Wanted, but this story may have just changed my mind. It's very descriptive. An example of that would be this line. "Gemma couldn't talk, what with her 5'2" frame." The way you structure your paragraphs and sentences is amazing. It's definitely a "show not tell" story. This is a really cool story and I will definitely be reading it a lot more!

To be honest I never really cared for The Wanted, but this story may have just changed my mind. It's very descriptive. An example of that would be this line. "Gemma couldn't talk, what with her 5'2" frame." The way you structure your paragraphs and sentences is amazing. It's definitely a "show not tell" story. This is a really cool story and I will definitely be reading it a lot more!

To be honest I never really cared for The Wanted, but this story may have just changed my mind. It's very descriptive. An example of that would be this line. "Gemma couldn't talk, what with her 5'2" frame." The way you structure your paragraphs and sentences is amazing. It's definitely a "show not tell" story. This is a really cool story and I will definitely be reading it a lot more!

To be honest I never really cared for The Wanted, but this story may have just changed my mind. It's very descriptive. An example of that would be this line. "Gemma couldn't talk, what with her 5'2" frame." The way you structure your paragraphs and sentences is amazing. It's definitely a "show not tell" story. This is a really cool story and I will definitely be reading it a lot more!

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First off, I love the title (because I love You Me At Six). I also love the story because it has The Wanted (I don't listen to them but I think they are gorgeous). What I love the most about your story is the character development. Sometimes that can be a difficult part but you have achieved it very well. Can't wait to read more!

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No idea who this is about, but I really liked it. I liked how each boy wasn't just a carbon copy of the other. Your character development is awesome. I think some of the events could use a little more build up, but that's just my opinion. You've got something good going on here. Keep it up!

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So interestingly enough, even though I don't really know any of their music, I did watch the reality show thing that the wanted did and I thought they seemed like cool guys. I think your writing captures their individual personalities really well. You've got a lot of great character development with Gemma. Sometimes things do happen quite suddenly in the story. Like sometimes the events feel like they could use a liiiiiiittle more build up, but that's my only real criticism. I really like your plot and its a cute story! I'll try to keep reading as you update :)
p.s. I was also happy you decided to focus on Nathan cause I thought he was the most adorable thing ever on the show!

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oh, a wanted fan fic. i absolutely love them, but i don't really know much about them and don't really read fan fics like these at all, but i want to let you know that the buildup you have in this story is rather wonderful. i like the way you write in your third person p.o.v because i can see it just like a movie.

i really like the way gemma and i like the way you state this disorder because it doesn't make her weak, but she's still coming off strong.

good job!