Rover - Comments

I do like the idea and plot of the story so far, however the chapters are quite small and in some parts seemed rushed. Some parts are unbelievable as well.Other than that it's a great idea and you should keep going, I do recommend you to go over your posted chapters though. I also find some parts of the story lack creativity, whilst it's a great idea it's like you lack inspiration in certain parts.

I kind of felt like the first chapter was really too cutesy to be believable. Maybe that's just because I have different standards or preferences in stories and what I read, but it just seemed gooey and like...overly cliche.

However, I do like the idea for the story. It's nice and simple and it sounds like something a movie would be based off of. A couple of foreign kids in a band, going to America.

You need to space your paragraphs and dialogue accordingly, by the way.

I kind of felt like the first chapter was really too cutesy to be believable. Maybe that's just because I have different standards or preferences in stories and what I read, but it just seemed gooey and like...overly cliche.

However, I do like the idea for the story. It's nice and simple and it sounds like something a movie would be based off of. A couple of foreign kids in a band, going to America.

You need to space your paragraphs and dialogue accordingly, by the way.