I like that this has a simple layout. It doesn't take away from the story. The first chapter was really well written snd you drew the reader in without being so overwhelming. The details were great abd I can already tell you won't have trouble with character development or depth further on. Fantastic job so far doll :)
Okay I really, really love the layout of this story. It's so cute! And when I saw this was featuring Frank I was like "WOOOO!" :D. I really liked the first thing "Cindy Levine didn’t think life was divine. In fact, she loathed it.". I don't know why, it just made me want to keep reading. I'm really liking this plot and I can't wait to see where it goes. You just write so well. So update soon. Recommended and subscribed for sure :)
“By the end of tomorrow, Cindy would be dead. “ Oh well, there’s no better way to start off a story, I think! It’s definitely very attention-grabbing and it spikes much curiosity in the readers. It’s a bit strange though, how she’s bothered by so many details such as the tan on her legs when after all she’s going to be dead the next day – it won’t really matter anymore, no?
“And maybe it was best to let them believe that just because someone smiled all the time, that meant they were happy. Truly and forever full of bliss. None of them even had a clue.” I liked this part, where there’s a hint of desperation and hopelessness in her thoughts. And it’s relatable and believable to me. It’s human nature really, how people tend to believe things that are on the surface, and either ignore the fact that something else could be going on, or just simply do not care/bother to find out more.
I’ll always loved band fic about Frank, and I’m looking forward to reading more about him. I’m liking what I read so far, but it’s really not much to go on. Looking forward to the rest of your chapters, hopefully soon!
This story is pretty damn amazing : ) I am a huuuge My Chemical Romance fan although I’m more of a Mikey girl ;) There is loads of description which for me isn’t so good because I have a really short attention span so I tend to lose interest quickly in a lot of stories, but not with this one! All your spelling and grammar is pretty much perfect from what I can tell but I wasn’t bothering looking for anything bad! I will definitely keep reading this! Carry on the good work!
I absolutely adore this. I have no other way to explain it.
Honestly, I'm not a big fan of MCR fiction, but this doesn't FEEL like MCR fiction. I mean, sure, you've involved Frank Iero, but it works in a way a lot of fanfics and/or featurefics don't.
You're writing is, technically, very strong and I found only a few, extremely small, extremely nit-picky grammatical errors, and that's only because I scoured for them. XD
I love where the plot is going, and I really like the way you've written it.
Though, I have to say, one of my favorite parts of the entire package is your layout. I don't know what it is, maybe the color scheme, maybe the picture, maybe I don't even know, but I adore it. And if layout maker is doing this by accident, it's the best accident I've seen in a long time. <3333
All in all, I really loved this and I greatly look forward to upcoming chapters! <3
This..is absolutely amazing! I'm a huge Frank fan, so anything with him in it will peak my interest. But this..is so much different from the other stories i've read. Different in a good way. I love your writing style, and how simply you write. It's captivating. I love it! Please update Soon!!!!
I love your writing. It's so . . . well, its simple but its captivating - if you get what I mean. And the layout is gorgeous, absolutely. No weird colors, promise! But another update would be good, yeah?
The summary was so simple, yet really captivating. I'm not really into Frank Iero, but this is simply amazing. Your writing style is really descriptive, the picture of the scenery is so vivid in my mind and it feels like I'm actually right there witnessing it all. I seriously can't wait until the second chapter, especially that last sentence left so many questions in my head. I'm definitely subscribing. <3
Oh, this was just wonderful! You have a great writing style. The last line was such a surprise, so I'm going to subscribe and assume there will be more. :]