So Much for My Happy Ending - Comments

I like this, it expresses your feelings which is good! Its good to vent feelings as it is a way to heal yourself. Was a bit confusing at times, but good.
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Hey, so uh first, I don't really know what to say... I mean, I've read plenty of stories on this site, and I'm having trouble not taking this as a strory, but I'll try.

I know (from your author's note) that this is something that happened to you, and I think this thing you did, putting the feelings into words and publishing them on a website is pretty cool, and, the style you used (changing fonts and stuff) is something I have seen before, but not that much (i don't know if that makes sense?) and I like it.
And, something else, I think I know what you feel like, I've had very strong feelings for a guy for two years now, he's a drug addict as well, he's a metalhead, and the basic reason I want to be in a band is because he gave me the need to be part of one, I mean, I really can relate to your piece of writing. Except the guy never notices me, but yeah that's not your problem, I guess you don't care x)
So, yeah, good luck with everything, and just keep in mind that if you nver act on your feelings, you never get anything... Don't mean to act like I know better or something, but, just saying this. Have a good day! ♥

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The opacity of the purple over the black with the white writing was a bit hard to read so I had to read it in the default layout. I really liked the background picture though. Rock / punk / whatever you want to call it is always cool in my book.

It was kind of confusing in the beginning. I thought that maybe you were playing around with font sizes and maybe didn't realize what you'd done. I started getting it towards the middle. It's a sad reflection that many people go through at least once. Getting your heart broken isn't easy and I think you got your point across very well.

There were some grammar mistakes throughout (towards the end there was a 'was' that was supposed to be a 'were') but I think you did well regardless.

This is a healthy way to vent your feelings. I do it all the time.

Hm..

When I first stumbled upon it, I groaned with annoyance because of the improper structure and the lack of plot. At the end, however, I read your little author's note and realized you were just rambling to yourself in story-form. Thats not a bad idea when it comes to venting.

I suggest, however, that you dont give that sense of "repitition" by explaining the lyrics exactly as is then writing the lyric line which, basically, re-states your paragraph. The lyrics should not re-state your paragraph, or vice versa. They should explain and/or complete each other.

Otherwise, I have nothing much to say.

Oh, and I liked the part where you said "The other kids made me feel stupid at times, and you'd save me by saying something ridiculous; then the attention's on you and I'd smile again." It was kindof a twist to the old "You'd save me by telling them off/smacking them in the face"