Just Tell Me It Was Real - Comments

Jesus lord what happened??? I am confused but very entertained! Really cool idea, but I might have nightmares
The only criticism I have is that the first person pov makes it a bit awkward. For example, the bit where she finds the dog dead, because of the 1st person and the way it's worded, ends up not having such a strong of an impact.
Other than that, the idea for this is very good and I really enjoyed it!

I really liked the details you went into during the story, it made it for the reader. I would think about maybe putting this in third person pov. I think it would allow more detail and give insight to why this figure is haunting the main character. You should also go in and look at your possessives. You say neighbors, when it should be neighbor's. It was a very good story though, I really liked it. Please don't think of my comment as bashing your writing, but giving you some advice.

its good. really confusing at times but good i like it. im just putting it out there he might be Schizophrenia i liked the part when the cops show up and say ur dog is ok, and when he finds a dead animal in the tub

Creepy, creepy, creepy, sent me a shiver, creepy, yet amazingly awesome. Defiantly wasn't expecting the ending, at all! I didn't find any flaws in the reading, and the layout gave it a more horror feel, if that makes sense? Good job, keep up the good work, and scare the living daylight out of other people!

I love stories like this, horror is just my thing.

First off, I really liked the idea of the layout but it hurt my eyes so I had Togo to default. I always make my layouts harsh so it isn't a bad thing. Everyone's eyes are different.

I'm used to horror movies with dead animals so the dog didn't bother me too much. I was surprised thought was all in her head though. Never read that before. I also really like how there wasn't any mistakes that threw me off. It was a clean read.

Very good story, I like how you ended that way. You can make it a one shot or add on. It's perfect. Good work on that.

First I gotta say I love the layout.

Now with your story
I just love your idea, and it got me creeped out so much; so much so that it gave me chills. I just love how your writing did that to me, most don't give me chills. I adore all your descriptions, you build up suspense really good, I haven't found any mistakes so that is a plus.

Keep up the good work.

I love the idea behind this and it's super creepy. The shadow thing is pretty scary and the weird occurences gave me chills. I do sort of wish that you had split it up into chapters, each chapter describing something the shadow did and building up the suspense even more. Still though this was really good. I hope you continue this and good luck with your contest!

Wow. This is sooo awesome.
Write more? I loved everything about. :)

Oh my lanta! That was scary! I saw the picture and I'm like NO I DON'T WANT TO READ THIS! Haha but it was really good! And you did a great job at scaring the crap out of me hah. I like how it was to the point but still detailed! I would like to know what happens with this girl, and what this shadow thing is. Will you be continuing this?
And is this for a contest? I can't remember! If it is I wish you luck! It's really well written and I don't believe there was any mistakes.

Oh my dear god, this this brilliant. At first, I was just like, 'oh, okay..', but by the end of the chapter, I was dying for more. You're grammar and spelling are fine, and you layout the story well. The only problem I have it with the blue on the black background -it's almost painful to look at, like it's too bright, but darker would be hard to read. But could just be me >.< Other than that, I love this story so far and I cant wait to read more :D

I totally agree with the previous comments. I felt as if you were actually telling me something that has happen to you. I was given this story to read in the new feature, the comment swap, and I'm really glad I did. I would really like to know about what kind of being the shadow is, and why it picked "you", and why the illusions were so scary.

I'd like to read more, and I think you should pump out a few more chapters for this story. ;)
No pressure.

Just like what Alexander Bernadotte said below, I like how this started off as if it was a true event, like how when you visit your grandparents and your grandfather sits you down to tell you a story and says he doesn't know if you'll believe him but you should anyway. xD I also really like the little things. Like the shadow and realizing that the dog wasn't barking. They're subtle little hints that things are off and most likely are going to get worse.

All in all I like this, a lot. Keep at it because this is wonderful, and I want to read more.

I really like how you start this story off like a true account, or even a diary. It really adds something to this story. Anyways, I honestly had to stop reading this when she found her dog’s body; my dog and I have a very loving relationship and it just pained me greatly to read that her dog had been murdered in such a brutal way. And then…apparently Grover isn’t dead at all and maybe she’s imagining it all? What’s going on here?! This is so weird!

I’m curious to find out what’s really going on with the delusion of the dead dog, the carcass of the dead animal in the bathtub, the blood in the sink, and that freaky shadow. Is it some sort of sign or something, or maybe a warning to this girl? I have no idea, but I’d love to find out. I really hope that you’re continuing this story, as it has massive potential to be a really, really great full-length horror story.

I really enjoyed reading this (and boy, am I glad I’m reading this in the day time, rather than before bed, lmfao) and I really hope that you’ll continue this. Great job! <3