Fantastic chapter one. the suspense is amazing and I love your writing style; gripping and yet relaxed too. great job with the character of the narrator - so real and likeable. I don't usually read this type of story but i loved this one. Good luck in your writing.
So, comment swap brought me here and I'll admit, this story isn't exactly my cup of tea. I only read the first chapter but I can see that you have some good ideas for this story and I'm sure that if it was something I was interested in, I would like it. You do a good job of describing things and the similes you use are good. Keep it up.
Oh! I really enjoyed this story. Well, first chapter that is since it's the only part of the story that I read set aside from the summary. It was really good. I like how you didn't rush into things. You took time to put detail and make it as realistic as possible. Very nice. If I was more of a fan of the Avengers, I'm guessing this is, I would read the whole thing. I do love Loki though. XD Just not my type of story necessarily.
As soon as I read the title and summary, I didn‘t have any interst at all, but I scanned the first chapter. It seemed alright, not the best, but definatly not the worst. I did like the details, I will say. I‘m sure this is a good story, you seem like a good writer, but I can‘t read this story. Sorry..but I do wish you luck with it, I‘m sure others will enjoy it. :)
Though this is well written, I'm confused as to how their relationship escalated so quickly. And how after she was taken out of the trance how cool calm and collected she was to be there...
Not overly familiar with the Avengers or with Loki (seen and immensly enjoyed the film but thats it) but nonetheless, I greatly enjoyed your story. It's very well written and exciting, which kept my attention, which I've seen in previous comments also, can be very difficult when you're reading from a fanfic based on a topic you know little about.
I got this story from comment swap and even though im not a big fan of this story topic i must say that you wrote it very well. I enjoyed reading what you have so far. I think you should continue you with writing it because it could go far.
I don't really know much about the Avengers but I enjoyed reading this story. It was really well written and it kept my attention (which usually doesn't happen if I am reading about something that I am not a fan, nor have no knowledge of).
The only thing I didn't like was the layout. It is a bit too dark and... distracting, and the green font was a little hard to read. That may just be me though. :D
I enjoyed what you have so far. I'm not all that familiar with the Avengers or Loki, except for what's been in the movies recently. However, I'm a fan of Thor and Loki so I really like this story. I like layout as well, but it it sort of makes it difficult to read the words. Or, maybe, that's just my eyes. Anyway, I enjoyed what I've read and seriously think you should keep up the great work :)
*Comment Swap* I am amazed! I haven't seen many stories like this around, yet I haven't looked all to hard either. This is amazing. I love what you did, and just everything you put into this. Clearly you know your stuff, which is very impressive. :) I really like what you've got going here, I'm interested. So keep up the good work. :)
This is one of the few stories that I have gotten from the comment swap that I actually enjoyed reading. I love the avengers and I love Loki. This story is really well written and I am excited to continue reading. I paused in chapter two to write this review because I was elated to have found some Loki/Avengers fanfiction! The only bad thing I have to say about this is that I do not like the layout. That is only my personal taste level, I'm sure other people find it lovely! I wish you the best of luck with this awesome story.
I'm probably like the 20th comment swapper but I really like the layout. Did you make it with the new layout creator or is it from the old? Because if you made it with the new one I give you props. It took me at least 3 days to create mine. Anyway, I'm not really into The Avengers but I bet this is a great story for people who enjoy The Avengers. Good Luck :)
Comment swap brang me here! Like the person below this comment, I do not know a lot about The Avengers. I just watched the movie! But anyway I really like the layout for this story, it fits it well and is easy to read. Also you don't have a lot of grammar mistakes and the plot is very well thought out!:)