Amanda Spark - Comments

WOWOWOW fanstatic description! I love how you really just showed not told you could have said: amanda was sexy. It's rare to come across a writer like this you have a natural talent. You wrote this beautiful, you should really try writing more descriptive pieces because you have a talent :)

this is really nice. it seems quite heavy and formal in the way it's written, but it's only five-hundred words so it carries it off. if it was any longer i'd say it would be TOO wordy, but as it is it's perfect.

you really do portray this amanda character wonderfully. you've left no detail to be guessed upon and it really shows well. the layout fits perfectly, and i love the whole lace background thing it's totally adorable. i'd love to read a story about amanda sparks, maybe from her point of view/the point of view of one of her admirers. good stuff. <3

Well first I'll start off with I like the background and the gif.
Second, you're an absolutely amazing writer. Your choice of words, like everyone else has said, was beautiful. You chose the right words and this amazed me. This definitely caught my attention, and for some reason I really like this. I hope you win your contest c:

Well first I'll start off with I like the background and the gif.
Second, you're an absolutely amazing writer. Your choice of words, like everyone else has said, was beautiful. You chose the right words and this amazed me. This definitely caught my attention, and for some reason I really like this. I hope you win your contest c:

This was beautiful written. The word you choose to use where brillant and i reall enjoyed reading it. I really like how you could say so much but with so little words. You are a really great writer and i look forward to reading more of you work

How utterly fascinating.

Your choice of words were absolutely beautiful. Your sentence structures were almost flawless. Honestly, if there were any mistakes, I didn't catch them. This piece was truly fantastic.
At first, I will admit I was a little put off by the idea of a Mary-Sue. All the girls wanted to be her and all the boys wanted to be with her because she was just perfect all around. I'm not really one for those types of stories/characters. They just seem unrealistic. But upon reading this, I felt like there was more to it that you left to your readers' imagination. I was slightly upset to see that the story was a one-shot and wouldn't be continued. Hopefully you decide to, but if not, there's always going to be that slight mystery behind it. I truly feel that there was more to Amanda and her seemingly flawless beauty. I wanted to know more by the end.

All in all, this was a great piece. I enjoyed reading it a whole lot. Beautiful. (:

Wow. This story says a lot with such few words. I really really like it though, and I'm a straight girl, but if I was a guy, I would be attracted to this girl in the first five seconds of meeting her. I like the way this is written and the way you use the words to describe her.

Wow. This story says a lot with such few words. I really really like it though, and I'm a straight girl, but if I was a guy, I would be attracted to this girl in the first five seconds of meeting her.

The picture had my attention right away. The layout was perfect for this story. The way you described the different sides to Amanda Sparks was phenomenal. It seemed as if she's the perfect human being, to all kinds of people. Women are jealous of her and men want to have her. The use of detail and description was great and the way the story flowed. Update soon?