Fairest - Comments

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The way you write is just stunning. You play with words in a very appealing way, I read it all very quickly and then re-read because I just love your writing style. The plot is also great, original and eye-catching. I love this story and will be recommending and subscribing!

You have a wonderful command of language and a very engaging beginning to your story. It really draws you in and keeps your attention. All the sarcasm is sure to appeal to a teenage audience. Its a very good genre and a clever and well-laid out story. You are sure from the very beginning that it is going somewhere fun soon. No grammar or spelling errors. I like the way the short paragraphs break up the longer narrative. It gives it a kind of edgy feel.

COMMENT SWAP! This story is flipping amazing I love everything about it your grammar is good and I love all your characters especially the sarcastic tone you use for some of them. I think chapter two is my favourite being as its so intersting and gripping. Please update soon!

I love the sarcastic tone of narration in this story! Snow White has such a strong personality that comes through in the writing, and I always love reading twists on classic fairytales. Not to mention the very unique beginning! It really set the smart tone for the rest of the story, and not to mention your grammar/spelling is perfect. It flows well and builds suspense in all the right ways – great job! c:

Wow, this is really good! I love the layout, too, it definitely suits the story I think. the summary had me interested before I even started reading, and I loved the beginning of chapter 1. It was so well written and just instantly caught my attention, props to you. I don't really have anything negative to say about this story, haha, the plot seems good, it flows, it keeps you interested. Good job! (:

This is lovely! Good grammar, not many errors. I feel like I don't get enough detail but that could be just me being super picky. I like the play off typical fairytales. You do a great job of it. Keep up the great work!

Out of all the things I've been forced to read through comment swap... This has been the least forced. The layout's amazing, the overall grammar's amazing, and most of all, the writing's amazing. I enjoy the kind of sarcastic tone to the writing and the idea of the whole thing. Thanks for an amazing story!!!!

Comment swap! :) I really enjoyed this: good grammar, punctuation, and spelling. Lovely lay out (easy to read font, the white contrasts really well with the darker colours), and I think it reflects the story well. I don't usually like first person stories but I really liked this. It was truly well written: the only think I don't like was the use of 'bit' throughout (for example "a bit unpopular")- I think it ruins your otherwise pleasant style. Maybe replace the word? Otherwise, this is great! Keep writing.

Comment Swap! This is very interesting, very unique. I really admire how dedicated and how thorough you write, it's very well worded also. The layout looks very nice and feels very calming. I quite enjoy this bit of work, I'll definitely subscribe and recommend! Try not to get too choppy with your paragraphs, I'm guilty of this as well. I really enjoy this fairy-tale type job you're doing, too. I can see the inspiration from all various parts of the genre. Keep on writing, man. This is a very good story.

Commet swap here! This sounds very interesting. I like, it though. I haven't read any stories like this before, and it gave me a strange vibe towards it. In a good of course. I never read something like this and I wonder how it;s going to unfold. Usually I turn away from these types of stories, but you put a lot of work into it so kudos for you! Seriously. I never put work in my stories and I never keep my stories because of it. So i can tell your putting a lot of time into it, which is another thing I don't do when it comes to writing stories. I was actually afraid of Sow White. The first time I saw it, I ran out of the room with the witch and the apple part. I'm a chicken. But I was five or something so don't judge! Haha. Fairy-tales are my favorite so continue please. And don't rush anything. Like I usually do, but yeah. Keep going please! :)

I didn't read the entire thing, but from what I read it's obvious that you put a lot of thought into this. You can see it in the richness and the intensity of the writing, and the layout as well. Effort is what makes a story worth reading. I like how you write this in the style of a fairytale. Keep writing :)

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So first off, I LOVE Snow White!! She was one of my favorite princesses growing up! I love your start to the story, explaining the meaning of Once Upon A Time! It's very unique and I enjoyed reading it! The layout also really drew me in!

I really found this piece interesting. Your introduction plus the narrator in the beginning of chapter one explaining the origins of "Once Upon a Time" was actually, I believe, very smart and unique. It made me kind of want to research a bit :) I just couldn't find myself able to remember a lot of the characters as they were rementioned, and I think a bit more background to the characters and the plot would do this story good. I've always had that problem though, even with movies and in real life. I suck at remembering names.

I really like this story.

I love the phrasing you use - primarily that you use intellectual words like "innocuous" instead of something obvious like "harmless". Just a little thing I enjoy in literature, haha.

I love this simile: "storm cloud of black silk and lace". Your wording really suits the genre and to be completely honest, I am quite jealous of your writing prowess. This sentence is amazing too: "He wore his privilege and power just as easily as most people wore boots." The pure sass makes me love this character: “That is the most patently untrue thing I’ve heard all day, and I spent most of my day with a lawyer.”

I can't wait to see how this story plays out (although I had to shake out of my head the assumption that Robin was Robin Hood!) Who inspires you to write? And I'm sure you must have a tumblr!

I'm really excited about this story! I am a huge fairy tale nerd (if that is even a thing), and I love your take on this story. I've seen SO MANY cliche versions of this story, and yours is so...off the wall (in a good way), I just love it. I love your voice in the writing, and the characters are polished and very believable. Definitely subbing. :)

I really like the story, it's such an interesting take on the fairytales

I really like the story, it's such an interesting take on the fairytales

(comment swap) So, I really liked reading this. I'm totally into fairy tales, mythology, and all of that other lovely stuff.I love how you started chapter one; telling the reader about how the whole once upon a time thing started (well, not exactly how it started but you know what I mean). I also just love the concept of this, what it ACTUALLY means to be "the fairest of them all,"and that it's not all that it's cracked up to be. Your writing style blew me away. Okay? That's how legit this is. I'm defiantly subbing and reccing. (That's probably not spelt right...)

All in all, I'm so happy that comment swap brought me here. You're doing a fantastic job, love. Keep up the amazing work, and I can't wait to read more! :)

PS: HAPPY NEW YEAR!

Wow. At the begining of the chapter I was like 'jesus, another Fairytail twist up -_-' but you have actually take what people have destroyed and made it proper. Not stupid cliche immature or just down right retarded idea for a fairytail idea. beleive me i have read at least fifty of these on mibba where they just only go by their rules and spit on the very foundation of what made the originally a good story. But you have kept that purity and just modified it to make is bloom much better then the orignal in my opinion. Thank you for the Wonderful read.

Yours sincerly, ShannanGBurnett

You have a really brilliant writing style but sadly, your story just didn't catch my eyes.

As well as you've built it up, painting your reader the most perfect picture you could it just didn't make me want to carry on. I tried, dear Lord, I tried but honestly, it just didn't grab me like I wanted it to.

You're great at bringing your characters to life, seriously. The Queen is a total bitch but I'm gonna guess that's what you were aiming for with her, of course. And the way you’ve written the scenes up, it’s mind grabbing and makes you continue with reading it – I honestly feel like I’m reading a Grimm fairy tale whilst reading this.

You can easily tell that you pride yourself with this story, you know, taking hours to write, edit and perfect it. It really shows with this amazing story. Seriously, it feels like I'm in the story when reading it but sadly, it just isn't my kind of thing...

Do continue this though because you've got twenty recommendations already meaning you've got a loyal fan base for it...