The Cursed - Comments

So just off the bat looking at the prologue you could double space the paragraphs, the reason why I say this is because it looks better to the eyes of the reader.

So far I like it I'm going to continue on to chapter one now, you have been told about the grammar and spelling errors so I wont make a point of pointing them out for you. (Everyone has them)

I like how you did with the 'voices' of the characters.

I honestly wouldn't mind seeing more in a chapter but I really Like it!

One thing I'm a little confused on though is, is the main character and Vampire or something else? I dont know If your trying something new or not but most vampires need to have blood after a certain amount of time to live, thats just something to think about.

Now I don't normally do this but here's a link to my story
http://www.mibba.com/Stories/Read/550003/Those-two-Guys/

I'm writing with a friend its about Vampires too, You could always take a look at it if you would like.

I'm looking forward to more! May the Update be soon!!!!

Grammar and Style - It's supposed to be that way, plus I wrote it at like midnight.

Characters - I'm not letting anyone know them just yet.

Setting - It's a dark concept but also rather true to the view point of which books about Vampires and Werewolves are going.

Plot - You're not supposed to just yet ;D

Thank you for your comments.

Grammar and Style - I noticed quite a few grammar errors, but nothing you couldn't fix with a quick look over. You had a lot of run-on sentences. You really need to work on the formatting of your story. Double space between each new paragraph.

Characters - So far, I don't really know your characters that well. I think you need to delve into personalities more, especially with your main character.

Setting - I like the concept you have. I think it's neat that they live in a world with mythical creatures.

Plot - I can't really tell where you're going with this yet, but I think it has the potential to be really good. Just keep editing your story and adding more descriptions.