Falling for You - Comments

Thank you so much :3

I really really love this!!!! Can't wait until Kiro and Minas dad come back into the picture. Awesome job!!!

haha yes, Tom needed some action :)

She pelvis slapped with Tom!!!!

Fuck. Yes

Thanks :) I am really trying to get a more natural tone of speaking, but I personally do speak that way lol but thank you, I'll try and work on it

Your sentence's are rather choppy and short. I am having trouble picturing what these people look like, where they are, so I would suggest some extra details in there. I was confused with the whole Sir and saluting things. I couldn;t tell if it was a giant joke or serious, a bit of clarity would be nice. I would also recommend taking it slower because it seems like they are already dating and how old are these guys? Because in your summary I was really confused that they were being sent to elementary school. Were they home schooled or something? I think you to clear up a few points and your story would be much improved. Good luck and may your pen be ever in your favor.

your doing great!

I just figured she'd be into that

Yay for earlie oral scenes! wen if it was with kristen lol

thanks :) it really is coming out easier :)

It's cute that Mina and Kiro are together lol

If you still have writers block I'd gladly help.

But I like what your doing so far. Don't stress it either! Everything will fall into place

Yay ! Can't wait

:) Thank you. I'm uploading more soon

That was lovely! I hope her dad doesn't find out about her and bill