diary of a dead girl - Comments

ok sorry guys for the formatting and the errors i will edit my story and then upload them again !and i would aprreciate if u could give me some help;)

oh god sorry, I tried my best to read it :/ English is not my native language either, and I do know how it is, this is how I wrote English a couple of years ago when I first started doing histories and fanfics. you need a beta-reader, one who goes in and fix your errors, else you story will be kicked off of here, they do not accept it, I know for a fact :/ I'll gladly help you beta-read if you want to :)

Ok... whoa! I'm not very good at reading text, I'm more used to Dracula and interview with a vampire type writing. So I'm sorry I can't read this until it is in English... or Romanian.... I love reading Romanian.

I'm sorry. No. Honey, just no. Please use proper formatting, editing, and for fucks sake English.

I'm sorry, but I could not read this.
I suggest you ask around for an editor, or simply use word.
Either way, this need a fair bit of improving.
If you do edit it, I'd gladly read it then :)

tanx for ur comment and suggestions!u r totally right about spelling and the conversation and stuff! the thing is english is not my native language and i kinda suck at spelling since i was little but i would use WORD next time to correct my spelling and i would double my space and yess the story is about me by the way

Your story is interesting, is it about you? If so it's really sad that it is, if not it's still sad. But to make this story easier to read I would suggest you space things out by double spacing when writing your story in the ADD Chapter section. You know what I mean right? I start a new paragraph to show you....

That's spacing so that things aren't clumped tightly and it's easier to read that way! :) And another thing I'm not sure if there is actual conversation in this because everything is so compacted but if there is then it should look like this:

"Hi," she grinned flipping her blonde hair over her shoulder.

I bowed politely, "Hello." But I didn't really want to say hello to her because no matter how nice she seemed, I see through it.

Also you should know that if you want your story out there you should use proper spelling or the Mibba editor might take it off :( I know it sucks but it's true. But you don't have to follow my suggestions that's all they are suggestions to make your story easier to read. ^_^ And remember while your on here, to write for yourself, and no one else but yourself!