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  • ignite this angel.

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    Woopsies did I really not comment on the last four chapters. Facepalm
    [/you win this round of "you're actually the worst at keeping up with the stories I actually post"]

    How wonderful to be a Princess, all alone, so beautiful, so deadly, so utterly perfect and untouchable and entirely unlovable.
    Can I just start off by saying that this does not sound too great. But on another note sdkjghdfhgkjlshgkjhfkjghds stop writing better than me!!1!!1211!1!

    To be loved would be a terrible thing.
    NOW DID YOU REALLY FOLLOW UP WITH THAT. Grampaa, you are moving so far away from your usual stories. Stop scaring me this is weird.

    ...You said this chapter would make sense. Chapter three is not making sense. Who is talking to her and why is she all 'zomg no this can't be happening' because of it?
    [/start making sense pls]

    Chapter four is kind of short by the way.
    [/lmfao I could be a detective]

    Aw don't tell me it was her mum talking to her. Aw. It went from weird to sad in under 100 words.
    Damn you.

    The first bit in chapter five is pretty sad too.
    “All she does is sit there and stare out the window. She never talks. Never smiles. Every time I try to take her out she panics.”
    I'd totally break down if a mosquito wasn't flying in my face. Brb I need a flyswatter.

    In a way she hoped she could save her. In a way she knew she couldn’t be saved.
    Cry BB all over again, but in a sadder, less bichy way.

    “Love her like you’ve never loved anyone before, and accept the fact that you may never be loved back.”
    OH MY GOD CAN YOU NOT. PLS JUST STOP THAT WAS SO NOT COOL.

    You're killing her off in the last chapter aren't you?
    [/I'll actually be really surprised if you don't. The title leads me to believe that someone's popping their clogs soon]

    [/pls ignore me]

    ...Wait, no one died?
    GRAMPAA DID I READ THIS CORRECTLY OR AM I JUST OVERLOOKING SOMETHING OR WHAT?

    Nah, never mind. I'll just ~interpret~ it as I please. File

    ...Yeah, I forgot to tell you what my favourite lines in the other chapters were, so um, yeah here's the one for the last chapter.
    A princess… not a real one, but a beautiful one, who would be loved and cherished throughout the entirety of her reign.

    (I'd tell you what my other favourites were but I don't really want to reread the other chapters. Oh well. You'll live. This is long enough already. lmfao)
    July 19th, 2012 at 09:28am
  • Starry.Eyed

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    Ignore that first quote. For some reason it's not showing, so if it appears twice then I sincerely apologize. haha

    First of all, I'd like to say that your layout is absolutely gorgeous. I love it. The writing is also really beautiful because the words flow together. I can't even express how much I like this.

    I'm not quite sure that I understand the whole death thing in the second chapter though. I can't tell if it's a metaphor or if she is really seeing and feeling death in the shadows.

    With dark lashes curling over emerald eyes she could read their faces, hear their thoughts, listen to the wind.
    For some odd reason, that last part makes me think of Pocahontas and her song colors of the wind. Anyway, this is my favorite line in the first chapter.

    She shouldn’t have spoken. The darkness had crept up through her throat, kissing her tongue, brushing through her lips and falling into the air surrounding her.
    I'm not quite sure why, but in chapter two this is my favorite line. It may be the morbidity...

    I don't really understand the third chapter either. I'm not sure who the random person is, or even their gender. I'm not sure why she thinks people die every time she opens her mouth (or screams). And I'm not sure why she wants to be down in the city so bad if she is scared to death of that same exact thing.

    I'm so confused and really hope that within the next three chapters everything will fall together. So...

    Update soon please! (:
    July 13th, 2012 at 05:05pm
  • Starry.Eyed

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    First of all, I'd like to say that your layout is absolutely gorgeous. I love it. The writing is also really beautiful because the words flow together. I can't even express how much I like this.

    I'm not quite sure that I understand the whole death thing in the second chapter though. I can't tell if it's a metaphor or if she is really seeing and feeling death in the shadows.

    <i>With dark lashes curling over emerald eyes she could read their faces, hear their thoughts, listen to the wind.</i>
    For some odd reason, that last part makes me think of Pocahontas and her song colors of the wind. Anyway, this is my favorite line in the first chapter.

    <i>She shouldn’t have spoken. The darkness had crept up through her throat, kissing her tongue, brushing through her lips and falling into the air surrounding her.</i>
    I'm not quite sure why, but in chapter two this is my favorite line. It may be the morbidity...

    I don't really understand the third chapter either. I'm not sure who the random person is, or even their gender. I'm not sure why she thinks people die every time she opens her mouth (or screams). And I'm not sure why she wants to be down in the city so bad if she is scared to death of that same exact thing.

    I'm so confused and really hope that within the next three chapters everything will fall together. So...

    Update soon please! (:
    July 13th, 2012 at 05:02pm
  • ignite this angel.

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    GRAMPAA, THIS IS MAKING LESS AND LESS SENSE AS TIME GOES ON.
    /not cool

    Because I don't understand, I'm just going to pick a favourite and leave. Yep. That's it. You got your praise yesterday. Wait a while. ;/

    She wondered if that was what made her beautiful… the fact that she was destined to die.
    Yes, the first line is the favourite. I don't even know why. It just is.

    /lmfao maybe it's 'cause it's the only thing that even remotely made sense

    ...It feels weird to leave a comment with so little, so uhh
    ummmm uh hmm
    Je ne comprends pas.

    ...Yep.
    BUT THIS IS GREAT STAWP SAYING IT'S BAD KAY BYES.
    July 9th, 2012 at 04:35am
  • ignite this angel.

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    I was going to be shocked about you already having two comments, but I forgot they were mine. Facepalm Ignore me please.

    But zomg stawp worrying aboot this. It's good. It really is.

    /and now Iggy shall attempt to give you a real comment with absolutely no flails and stuff!

    First and foremost, I love that you based(?) it on Rapunzel. I've actually really been wanting to read a story along those lines ever since I saw Tangled Shifty and I'm actually really glad that you're writing one.

    And akfdskjlhaskldghkjashg it's just that much better because it's YOU that's writing it.

    /lmfao already cheesy and flaily

    I really don't think I should quote a lot and flail over each little bit because this is short as it is and I don't want to quote the entire story here, so I guess I'll just go with my favourite line(s).
    But sometimes the darkness in her was too much. It seeped through her body, through her mind, through her heart. She was a beautiful Princess but on the inside she was as black as coal.

    I honestly wish I could tell you why I like that, but I can't. It's just gr8.

    But yeah. I'll leave this train wreck of a comment at this because it's getting long and will become pointless if I continue.
    (Plus I think it may be topping the story in terms of words, so yeah...)
    July 8th, 2012 at 08:16am
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    WAY TO RIP OFF FRACTUS' LAYOUT GRAMPAA. TOOK IT TO THE EXTREME I SEE. lmfao lmfao
    July 2nd, 2012 at 06:59am
  • ignite this angel.

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    The layout is lovely, Grampaa. Stawp talking.

    Oh, and I love your summary.

    [/spot the sarcasm]
    [/hint: it's not in the first two sentences]
    July 1st, 2012 at 06:34am