I don't have very much to go on criticism wise because there is only a prologue posted but I saw a couple mistakes in your summary the word Fame is capitalized and at one point in the line "Yeah; thats me" you used a semi-colon which is more or less used to connect two independent statements. Also, very creative story idea. Keep it up :) have a nice day.
July 2nd, 2012 at 10:35pm