The Path He Ran - Comments

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First off, I like the title a lot for some reason. I think it sounds really cool, 'cause it could be, like, a poem or a work of art or something really cool, too! But I like it as a title for a story. (Sorry for rambling) Anyways. I really like your story. I think it's interesting - I was hesitant about Comment Swap, thinking it'd shoot myself in the foot by getting some sappy teenage romance story :) But instead I found this! :) I really like this a lot and I enjoy your writing style. There's something elegant about it.

I was sad that it ended quickly. It doesn't tell much of who Em is or what he's really doing, but I'm a curious cat, and I like to stick through til the end. I do like the structure of the story so far. While reading it, I almost felt like I could actually hear the caveman speaking. I could imagine what he looked like. I could picture it, and that is good. I also think that it's sometimes good not to know where you're going with a story, but remember to try and keep a guideline. Try not to venture too far away from what you originally started. I see that happen a lot, and am guilty of it myself. I do think this is going to be a great story and I can't wait to read more. ^^