Gentle Heart - Comments

I am from comment swap and I am greatfull I came across this story. It is beautifully written! It truely is! I'm not usually one from comic fandoms, although I do like comics and mangas, but this is amazing. I am in a bit of a hurry to go soon, but I will definitely finish this and keep updated when I do. You should be really proud of your work. It is really good! Good luck with story, and your future stories as well!

Ooooh, this was eventful. :D The whole time, I was just waiting for Thorsy to bust in and pop a cap in Fury. I love how Fury and Talen got along, however. She came off as an emotional, nervous wreck, but on the inside she was seriously considering opening a can of whoop ass on him. XD Perfect!

And once again, Thor crashing through door = perfect. He honestly does not give a damn about how many poor doors he's demolished. He's Thor, and Thor doesn't need courtesy! XD XD

Not much happened in this one, just dialogue, but it laid out the grounds for the rest of the story very well. Once again, you showed how fragile Talen is but at the same time we get to see a bit of her cooler inner person as well. :D And the tidbits about her mother training while she was young and how her brother had died in battle, those little anecdotes were endearing yet not too info dumpy. I like how you keep dropping little pieces of her past here and there without just unloading her whole life story at once. I also love how we are very very slowly getting to know the real Talen. Once I think I know her, you add in another little character trait. It's like an egg hunt XD excuse the horrendous simile.

Yay! I loved it! I'm excited to see what happens next with Fury. :D I wanna see her beat his ass!

lol now that I know she can kick major ass all is well, I just want her to bust her shit out, even if it does cause mass destruction!

oh shit, well now hopefully this means Thor gets to come rescue her! or she gets to kick some major ass out of no where!

Oh my goodness, I keep writing you the LONGEST comments EVER. I need to slow down, hahahaha.

Oh my goodness, I keep writing you the LONGEST comments EVER. I need to slow down, hahahaha.

Yessss! This was good! I loved how Thor like crashed through the door toward the beginning; that's so in character for him, lol. I feel like he doesn't intend to be so destructive yet he's so huge and dimwitted that he honestly doesn't even notice. Lmao.

I also kinda appreciated the fact that she didn't try to run from the agents. In most stories, the protagonist suddenly gets ballsy and decides they can outrun their pursuers. But Talen stayed very true to her character and pretty much let them take her, because she was too shy/nervous/confused to do anything else. I enjoyed that little minor detail, haha.

And call me weird, but I also like how she and Ralph get along. It's like a mutual respect thing. And it's like he doesn't even suspect her of being anything but a talented, intuitive person. In the same vein, she acts so calm and normal around him. It's kinda like she trusts him enough to be relaxed around him despite how nervy she actually is. But I feel like I'm reading way too much into this, lol.

I'm so excited! I can't wait to see how she and Fury interact in the next chapter. Update soon? :D

Oh my gosh!!! I have to find out what happens next!!
What they want with her and where the frick is Thor when you need him!!!
Hahaha I love your story!! Can't wait for more! ❤

finally got a chance to read this!!!!
I do love her obvious heartbreak and how her emotions are tearing her in so many directions, simply love it! XD
I do wish that she would be a little less meek though, but I do love strong women characters.

Ahhh, good good good goooood chapter. Love the camaraderie between Talen and Thor. It flows so well and seems so natural. And Talen's personality is really taking shape; we can see how shy she is here, but also how she finds it easy to confide and Thor, and also how going for a ride can ease her mind. Stuff like that, little details like that are what makes a character dynamic and you've got lots of them. :)

I liked how the last line was a thought from Talen. I think you need to write more of those. It's 3rd person POV so we can see in her head as it is, but I think that hearing Talen's thoughts could prove to be very interesting.

Once again, it was fabulous and I cannot wait to read more. :) And thank you so much for dedicating this to me! It means a lot!

I have decided to stalk out your story page.. So you might find some comments from me here and there.. Just as a heads up xD anyways, I really like this so far. It's off to a good start and it doesn't sound like anything I've read before. That's a plus. A big one! Hmmm.. I don't think I can say much else three chapters in so.. Subscribing! And good story

Yeaaaah! I love it! :) It's just like I would imagine it. Totally awesome. And Talen is even more shy that I thought she would be and I looooove it. She's perfect. Her interactions with Jane are great, and Thor's dialogue is really good for how much you were doubting yourself.

The only thing I wanna suggest is to separate separate characters' dialogue with paragraphs. You did it for the most part, except for a few larger paragraphs where you had, for instance, dialogue from Thor and Talen in the same paragraph. Usually, each character's speech gets its own paragraph.

But other than that, I can't say I have a single complaint. So excited for the next part. :D Write more right now!

Hey I really like your story!!
It has such a unique plot already and I can't wait to see how it unfolds!

Hey I really like your story!!
It has such a unique plot already and I can't wait to see how it unfolds!