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  • poisonXXgirl

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    So awesome! I love your series! Don't even know what to say. It's just so epic! =D

    On to book four! <3
    January 16th, 2015 at 05:22am
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    *lies on the floor and screams forever* I KNEW IT I KNEW THERE WAS GONNA BE A CATCH OF SOME KIND I KNEW IT. I want to write you a good comment but my hands are shaking and I'm just in awe at the moment I'm really sorry. I just wow wow wow. It was so good? Like, not an ending I was expecting - it was better than I was expecting by far! It was so awesome my brain's just '????///????/????/?>?'. BRING ON BOOK FOUR. (Where hopefully I'll comment a little better.)
    April 5th, 2013 at 12:06am
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    oh my god you let me think Jake wasn't ok oh my god. I'm so happy he's still hanging in there! But I am still pretty suspicious of Hartnett because this really does seem too good to be true although I guess it does make sense for her to want to get rid of them. I just want to know what happens goddammit! Still, reading this is awesome because your prose is very nice and stuff and it flows really well and in this chapter I thought the part with Jake was extra good, especially where description is concerned.
    March 23rd, 2013 at 09:59pm
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    Okay so now I'm feeling slightly less emotional and when I say slightly I mean slightly, I think I can comment on this chapter properly. First of all, I really liked how it was a little shorter than usual - a lot of impact was added due to the fact there wasn't any dithering about. I also really like, throughout this story in fact, how Simeon's injuries, for example, weren't ignored the moment after he'd gotten them. Like how you mention Rina brushing against Simeon's burn. ALSO, I really, really like how your narrative kind of reflects how the character is feeling. Like I said earlier, here it was quite snappy because Simoen wasn't waxing poetic and that is really quite effective. Finally, oh my god this story man like how do I deal I need to know what happens next I'm worried their friendship is going to go downhill from here oh god.
    March 18th, 2013 at 06:10pm
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    i'm in tears i don't know how to form words i'm sorry i was gone so long reading like 10 chapters so fast has left me in a total mess i promise i'll get you a proper comment with actual stuff soon but i'm not ok? like i loved jake so much i don't know what to do with myself jesus christ this story man i don't even know well done congrats it's so cool and so painful? i just. yeah.
    March 17th, 2013 at 01:43pm
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    Well that wasn't what I was expecting...
    March 10th, 2013 at 03:31am
  • HannaLiisa

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    Gosh, this is amazing, now that I'm finally on my vacation, I could read this. A-m-a-z-i-n-g. I'm dying to read the next chapter.
    February 23rd, 2013 at 02:06pm
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    oh dear lord I've been gone from the internet forever! I've been too caught up with life and being ill to get on mibba, but it was so awesome to finally catch a moment and see that there were so many chapters to read! I am practically ripping my hair out with the suspense of these chapters - the tension is unbearable. Like, I'm just trying to read so fast that my eyes are going all blurry because I have to know what's gonna happen next and I just- gah. Also, the traps and such in the Maze are really cool and the psychological parts really makes the hair on the back of my neck stand on end. I'm trying to make this into a substantial, useful comment but I am just so in awe of this 'verse and story and wow where have my words gone I just look forward to the next update okay.
    January 31st, 2013 at 10:11pm
  • HannaLiisa

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    Your writing skills are amazing! I really like that your story isn't predictable. I never expected them to get caught, well, not in this scale, not like that. When I'm reading it, I think you'll write in one way but when I read on, it's completely different from what I had imagined. Wow, just wow.
    I can't really put into words how much I love your stories. I hope that you'll be famous writer one day soon so you could do this full time not alongside another job :D
    January 5th, 2013 at 10:34pm
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    OH MY GOD. This is so not okay I don't know how to quite gather my feelings into words. I just- no. That was one hell of a plot twist, congrats on that, but it was so painful. I was kind of wary of Hartnett and I was thinking that surely it couldn't be that easy but then she was acting so honest that I began to slightly think maybe but no. And I cannot deal with this oh my god. On a less emotional note, the Maze itself was also really awesome too and all of the traps like the stairs were very clever - I also thought how you included all the TV needs money stuff because it made it seem so real. And now I'm just going to bite my fingernails of in anticipation for what's gonna happen next.
    December 29th, 2012 at 02:07pm
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    I think that there shouldn't be suspense at this point. After all, they're not creeping around the compound and sneaking past a dozen guards - they're being impulsive and climbing over the wall and not considering anything, really. Actually, I think the lack of suspense is what really made this chapter for me. I was half expecting something to go wrong, because duh it can't go that easy, but I was completely unprepared for how wrong it went, so that was a really cool twist for me.
    Also: oh god Jake honey be okay okay get out of there and Tim and Rina you be awesome and do some awesome stuff and make everything okay again gahh.
    December 21st, 2012 at 01:08am
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    oh my lord no no no no no you are not just posting this for the sake of it no. I'm still reading it! Heyheyhey! Remember me? I have just been so busy lately with work stuff and deadlines etc. that I barely have time to check Mibba, let alone catch up on stories and give them the comments they deserve. At this very moment, I should be doing a load of work but I missed this story so I'm putting it off for a little longer. Okay, so here is most likely a long-ass, not very eloquent comment on the chapters I've caught up on:
    oh wow can this story get any cooler like I JUST. I just can't. I really really really really liked how well you showed everyone completely cracking under the strain (and I liked that you acknowledged that they were under a considerable amount of strain in the situation because a lot of writers don't do that) and how they all turned on each other a little. Also, I thought the way that the way Tim kind of backed out was really cool because no one is an awesome hero and then I was also really glad that you redeemed them at the end because I don't want to dislike Tim and Rina. ALSO CASPER. ALSO CARL. Also oh my god poor Simeon poor baby get of there this very second with an act of pure badassery or something and also yay for the others being really cool and not just leaving him. But now what on earth is going to happen I just curled up on my bed and made a dying whale noise because of the tension oh god.
    ... and this comment wasn't substantial or constructive in any way. Wow, I suck. I'm sorry.
    December 16th, 2012 at 11:57pm
  • NathanWatt

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    I must say, the Author comment below Chapter 1 is wrong. Not a good chapter? Was good in my opinion. I don't know what Hurricane Heart is, so will look that up, but this seems like a pretty interesting story.

    I've been reading a few, so unfortunately, you've happened to pick the short straw and I've only read one of your chapters. But, I will be saving this page to my favourites so I can come back and enjoy the rest at a later date.

    Good work, keep up the writing. Descriptive and just plain interesting.
    December 4th, 2012 at 10:24pm
  • HannaLiisa

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    I'm so sorry I have been absent again- we have been renovating my room and, I must confess, I started watching Doctor Who and I'm too addicted for my own sake. But enough about that. I can't imagine how they are going to get on that plane and to Europe.
    I still can't comprehend the fact that everyone who's caught is sent to the Operation. Way too cruel. Your writings are still amazing and I'm so sad for Jake, I hope he's going to find someone for him in Europe :)
    November 24th, 2012 at 06:48pm
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    My god my heart is pounding. Jesus Christ, you sure know how to create an atmosphere! I am on the edge of my metaphorical seat and slightly dying trying to figure out (again!) how they're going to get out of this one. Also, while I'm here, I thought I would say that I am in love with how realistic the people and their interactions are in the stressful situation. Like, nothing can endear me to a story more than realistic thought processes and reactions and general feelings, in search of a better word, in a character. NOTHING. And my god, you've honed that skill perfectly; all of Tim and how Simeon's the calm-in-face-of-panic and snappy Jake and somewhat-schemingly-aware Rina and ugh I just love it so much okay.
    November 5th, 2012 at 09:10pm
  • HannaLiisa

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    Every time I read or watch something with that kind of chasing I think how are they supposed to escape that, it always seems impossible with the villains right on their heels. But you solved it nicely, with them splitting up and everything.
    I really like the underground and tunnels. In every book the picture in my mind differs from the others. I'd really like to try and live in the tunnels you wrote about in Chasing Imagination :D
    Tim and Jake and their constant bickering are awesome :D
    October 27th, 2012 at 07:40pm
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    Migraine headache + necessary homework = bad comment but still, I thought I should tell you how well I thought you had handled all the action in the last couple of chapter's I've just caught up on. Lots of the time people mess up the pacing and go too fast so nothing makes sense or go too slow so the effect is lost, but I think you've got it nailed down pretty well here. Also, I really liked how the language you used corresponded to the situation and I thought the Tim and Rina interaction was a really nice thing to see. The thing is, I've been a-thinkin' and I'll be damned if I can figure out how the hell they're gonna get out of this. Which is good, I guess.
    October 23rd, 2012 at 12:46am
  • HannaLiisa

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    I am so-so sorry that I haven't been here for such a loooong time. Crazy times. I use my computer once a week, if I'm lucky, I usually use my phone to do the essential stuff but I use my computer for reading meaning that I just read about 20 chapters (which I utterly enjoyed, by the way).
    I like how different America is from Europe starting from the number of Soulless to The Maze and the harshness of the situation. The Martyr's Run is madness. The president is even madder. A cruel human being, if I should even call her that.
    It's cool that you put some Hurricane into this story too. I really liked the part where they saw the Soulless chasing her. Kind of a "What the heck?" moment for them :D
    I have been wanting to read this for a long time, but I always lacked the time. Now it's 2 am and I can't stop thinking about it.
    I'm not sure if I should have read it earlier because I really enjoy reading a lot at once but I'll do my best to read it more often now :)
    Well done and good night! Or morning/day as you'll probably won't read it now. But then again who knows, the time difference and all :D
    October 20th, 2012 at 01:09am
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    Oh my god it sucks so much that I have no time to get on Mibba and read this any more. But anyway, catching up with all the chapters has been awesome but I'm so exhausted so run-on sentence warning. I really love how this story and Hurricane Heart are so interlinked and how in HH you don't know but then now I'm going 'ah, I remember that!' and it's really cool and also I thought the pace at which the character development and plot are going it spot on and the politics aspect is just as perfect because governments etc. are split and people in these things disagree and the goddamn detail of how there are different names for the same thing is so clever and it gives me a fuzzy feeling and the way that you write about the feeling-left-out-because-via-webcam and so on is so insightful and delightful and who the hell is this guy just standing there and oh lord I love Jake so much and Simeon and Tim and Rina and eeeerrrhhhlahsldh.
    October 7th, 2012 at 08:06pm
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    I return from an abyss of work and colds AND WILD MARTYR'S RUN CHAPTERS APPEAR. Oh my God, I know I say coherency but let's forget that for now because (run on sentence/crap capitalisation warning) oh my god I cannot even. I just loved how Tim was being a bit of an arse in Salt Lake City but you couldn't even blame him because they were friends he hadn't seen in a while and then there was this beautiful Jake viewpoint kind of moment where the sad geek inside and the insecurities came to the surface and Rina was jealous and it hurt and then there was this wonderfully symbolic and epic storm that paralleled with Simone's pent up arghgh and it was the kind of thing you write English essays about and there were these cracks forming in the group which is so realistic because of strain and such and then contact with the Master and Carl and mention of Hurricane and it's lovely to see HH from the outside and then that line about the party YES. Yes. YES. yes yes yes. That is the feeling I get. This kind of despair and almost envy and I cannot wait to find out what happens next and [insert high pitched shriek of I-cannot-even-what-the-feels-help-argh].
    September 21st, 2012 at 12:16am