This Ain't a Fairytale - Comments

  • just.add.ice

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    Okay, so I hate to say it but comment swap brought me here, and I'm so glad it did! If I had more time, I'd read the entire thing cover to cover (you know what I mean :P )

    The characters in the first chapter are so adorable! You portrayed their relationship perfectly! Just enough to dialogue to balance out the decryption, which is always an A in my books. You nearly had me tearing up when she started tearing up, not gonna lie. I love the shoving bit and the wrestling. True friendship right there. Growing up around hockey players that's exactly what would've happened if any of them had left for Junior A hockey. Thank God we have a team in town :P
    September 20th, 2012 at 06:47am
  • soupy

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    Sorry Leigh - you MUST walk!!! It may be the first time he hit you, but if you do not get out, it will NOT be the last. He will make every excuse - he may even blame YOU - but he will SWEAR it will never happen again.

    But it will!

    Get out now - you have places to go - people who care about you. Just GO!
    September 3rd, 2012 at 12:45am
  • saudade.

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    Oh, shit.

    And it begins. I just don't know what to say. I already hate Josh, but I'm hating that Leigh won't kick him to the curb. Ugh, I'm feeling conflicted and i don't like it. But I did like the chapter!
    September 2nd, 2012 at 04:48am
  • Colby_Armstrong9

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    Poor Sidney, he's so confuse. I wonder if he is going to tell Jordan his suspicions? I don't think he should, not just yet because Jordan is likely to fly off the handle. I don't know what Sidney should do but he has to do something. He must get his best friend back because I love the relationship she and Sidney have as friends. Excllent job! And if you need any help, just give me a shout out and I can try to help you :)
    August 19th, 2012 at 06:04pm
  • temporarylove

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    I really like this. I feel like your writing all the right things and not being too obvious with the story. And I especially love that there's not some underlying love story between Sid and Leigh. It's so cliche and such a turn off to me story wise. Love it, keep on writing. :)
    August 19th, 2012 at 08:01am
  • Colby_Armstrong9

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    Josh is a bitch. I literally am going to beat the crap out of a fictional character. I hate guys like that. It just gets me so mad! My best friend Brianna dated a guy that got jealous of how much time she spent with me! Seriously guys like that piss me off like no other. Get over yourself Josh! Her world can include friends! Ugh, Sidney I beg of you, please beat him up for the sake of your movie night! Grrr. Still love it though!
    August 8th, 2012 at 12:43am
  • Colby_Armstrong9

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    Aw, Sid and Leigh talk! I loved every minute of it. They are cute best friends. Josh just needs to fall in a hole some place where no one will find him and he won't ruin any more stories. He's annoying, if you really loved her then you wouldn't give a crap if she was texting her best friend to know he was safe. He's an idiot too. He really just needs to be beat up by Jordan, that would make everyone happy. I love it!
    July 29th, 2012 at 09:34pm
  • Colby_Armstrong9

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    GO SIDNEY! Wow, I just felt like I was at a Pens game because I swear I scream at Sidney like that a lot during the game lol. I am so proud! He is being awesome and I am totally okay with him ruining the moment. That was something I would do, so I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. Jeez you are on a roll. You are just giving me all kinds of inspiration for my story. I love this chapter a lot, even though there was no Jordan in it. Great job!
    July 25th, 2012 at 03:33pm
  • Colby_Armstrong9

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    NOOOOOO!!!! She can't see this Joshua man! I do not approve! I repeat, I do not approve! Sidney do something! What kind of friend is he? Grrrrr. Still love it though!
    July 25th, 2012 at 05:01am
  • WoahBroWoah

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    see, i had this wonderful idea to go on comment swap, and somehow it brought me to this, which is weird because i feel like i should have already read this considering i love all your other stuff! poo:( well, i freaking love this one as well.. it just works, as always:)
    July 25th, 2012 at 04:36am
  • saudade.

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    Eww. It's Joshua. We don't like him. haha, but cute update. I hope that we get to see some more Jordan and Leigh interaction.
    July 24th, 2012 at 03:49pm
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    Aw, Jordan. Such a cute update! I can't wait for more!
    July 20th, 2012 at 06:47pm
  • saudade.

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    I love the relationship between Leigh and Sidney. But jesus, Jordan needs to get a move on it! The suquel can't come fast enough, haha. Great job!
    July 19th, 2012 at 03:50pm
  • Colby_Armstrong9

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    Wow Jordan, you are so smooth. I kind of like this side of him. He seems like a hopeless romantic as compared to a romantic, but its really endearing. I can't believe he still hasn't met her yet! Get going Gronk! Wtf. I also love how protective Sidney is and how sure he is that Leigh will never date Jordan. Boy, he clearly has not read the sequel lol. Looking forward to more!
    July 17th, 2012 at 04:28am
  • Katie482110

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    This looks really awesome! I really can't wait to read the rest of it :)
    July 14th, 2012 at 04:51am
  • Colby_Armstrong9

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    Oh, Sid, you and your high pitch giggle. But I love you anyway. He is an awesome character. I really like him thus far. Also, I loved how embarrassed Jordan got when she caught him looking. I laughed at the fact that she is sort of prejudiced against hockey players and she has a hockey playing best friend. That works out. Just a small technical difficulty, you put Anna instead of Leigh for her name in this chapter, I forget where. I don't know if that was on purpose or not. I cannot get over how awesome Sidney is already. Keep going! I want more of him and for the blond hockey player to get his butt in gear and introduce himself!
    July 14th, 2012 at 12:05am
  • saudade.

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    Ahhh!!!! I'm so excited!!! I can't wait for what's next! Ah, god. I'm currently not capable of forming coherent sentences and thoughts, I loved this update so much. Forgive me. I'll try again later! Can't wait for more!
    July 13th, 2012 at 10:08pm
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    I loved the sequel to this, so I'm SUPER excited to see what happens next! Can't wait for more!
    July 9th, 2012 at 04:21am
  • Colby_Armstrong9

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    I think it is a great idea! I also like the fact that her and Sidney are good friends. Great minds think alike because in my story I have the female lead being his neighbor. I am really curious to what comes next and how she first meets her beau lol. I really enjoyed the first chapter because I can appreciate the best friend relationship. Amazing start!
    July 9th, 2012 at 02:07am