Breathe In, Out. - Comments

@Darlig Twin
I'm really sorry if it sounded completely negative, I tried to give advice to make it sound better and I probably did come off as sounding like a complete jerk....
Your story was well with the dialogue, and how the story flowed through the use of dialogue only. That is something that is hard to do for most writers, without a lot of setting to back up what is going on in the story.
The whole point I was trying to make is that Alex sounded more like she had a social anxiety disorder than just a blanketed term for anxiety.

@ Queen of Suburbia
Wow, there was nothing positive in that comment at all...Never seen that before. xP

In reference to Alex's personally/attitude, she was based off of me, and I have quite a bit of anxiety, sooo...I'll just leave it at that.

Just a bit of advice. Normally when people comment on things they point out the weakness and the strengths and usually comment about events/happenings in the story. You just kind of broke it down bit by bit and only focused on the negative.
Thanks anyway though. ^^

Generally, Anxiety disorders are not like what you have described. The anxiety disorder Alex has sounds more like a Social Anxiety disorder than a Generalized anxiety disorder. Also teachers will typically not be privy to knowing if the student has a mental health disorder until an event occurs in the class, like a kid starting to hyperventilate when having to speak in front of the class. Also, they wouldn't be considered special ed for having a social anxiety disorder.

You used a lot of explanation points in this story, and although it got the point across that Alex was very anxious I think it also was a bit redundant at the same time.

This story was very fast-paced and almost seemed a bit rushed. I think adding a little more suspense to it like having a few more examples of Alex in other social places would have benefited the story a lot and really showed how she had improved over time.

Yay! I've been wanting to write a story very similar to this for awhile. I'm glad someone beat me to it ;) Anyways, I won't lie. I really do like this. I actually smiled when she spoke at the end. It made me so happy. Other than a couple grammar mistakes, this was really good. I hope you continue to write and go on with this story.

I've never heard of Anxiety Disorder before, but it's interesting. I'm glad Alex finally spoke at the end. When the girl talks to Alex, it should be, "Hey." There were a couple missing commas, but otherwise it was good! Keep writing<3

Aww I feel so bad for Alex! I wish her dad could be more understanding and see how difficult it is for her to overcome her anxiety! Of course the fact that he doesn't understand is really realistic, so don't get me wrong, I like that element of the story. I also really like how we get to see what's going on in Alex's head when she starts to have anxiety attacks in response to people talking to her; great writing technique! And I love how she overcomes it to say "hi" in the end :) overall great first chapter, I can't wait to see where you go from here!