It's a good story but I think tht u should make it longer and not just update the story with fillers which is probably y the chapters r short, like in chapter three it began with few weeks later, I think u should have a chapters that leads to Yani and Em datin instead of the readers curious on how they got together in the first place and also chapters on how Nikki is feeling towards Em during the tour until Yani and Em began datin, do u understand where I'm gettin at it isnt goin to be as great of a story until u add some details and critical information in it, cant wait to read more update as soon as u can :)
September 19th, 2012 at 06:16am