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  • boyking

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    i'm rereading this and cryin cause it's perfect
    September 14th, 2012 at 12:06am
  • HowlingHale

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    at first i was a bit disappointed that you erased the second chapter, but i knew you wouldn't keep that up for long xD amazing x3
    August 13th, 2012 at 11:16am
  • boyking

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    "I'd say this isn't an episode of Goosebumps, you little fuck." goddamn it i love this story and i love how well written your characters are and basically all i can say is that this is pure genius (and also i'm a little sad i cant call it chest death anymore)

    you're perfect
    August 13th, 2012 at 08:57am
  • HowlingHale

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    the title drew me hear and at first i didn't want to read it but your writing style is just the best - from anything i've ever read on here. i don't care if you don't know what you're doing, it's simply awesome shit so you better keep writing this story x]
    August 11th, 2012 at 08:29pm
  • vices

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    omfg dude
    you are my HERO
    I swear to god.
    this is so perfect.
    I like Reggie a lot, ugh, Y DID HE HAVE TO DIE.
    SRSLY. please update soon.
    August 11th, 2012 at 03:59am
  • topless

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    Jesus Christ you're fucking brilliant and awesome and my god can you WRITE.
    Favorite story on this website by far.
    August 10th, 2012 at 11:24am
  • ladyschrei

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    Chapter Two

    First of all, YAY I'm glad you updated ^0^

    The blood trickling between her teeth reminds me of Christmas.
    That line was really weird. Lol.

    About ten paragraphs in you said: Reggie pulls out is comb and says, “You know I’ll always clear up my dick schedule for you.”...
    I think you mean to say his comb.

    When he stops James you said: He blinks and takes a step back, and his eyes tell a little bit dazed.
    I don't think "tell" is the right word for that. Then again, that's just me xD

    So this chapter is weird XD But I like the story, it's really good ^-^

    Please write some more soon! :)
    August 10th, 2012 at 04:08am
  • vices

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    this is really funny.
    I don't even know how to react.
    I LOVE THIS.
    fucking Galen is awesome.
    July 20th, 2012 at 01:46am
  • ladyschrei

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    The title of this story makes it sound really interesting. The summary does too, because it's so simple but tells so much. BUT THE LAYOUT IS BRIGHT. It's not too bad, I think it's just the links to the chapters that does me in. LASKJSDLKFJDLK.

    Anyway, I kept pronouncing Reggie like reggae. How stupid am I? LMFAO.

    Chapter One

    This story really starts off strong, I'll tell you that. I like the characters and everything so far ^-^

    When you start talking about Beatrice a few paragraphs in, you said: And she’s saying, “It wasn’t him time to go, y’know.”
    I think you meant to say it wasn't HIS time to go.

    I love all the names you use in this ^-^

    I murder my cigarette against the asphalt.
    I really loved that line.

    Anyway I'm subscribing and recommending this story because it's awesome ^0^
    July 18th, 2012 at 09:58pm
  • topless

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    My mouth is opening and closing and I can't seem to find the words to describe this perfection, but my GOD it's perfection.
    July 16th, 2012 at 09:27am
  • bitter taste

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    This was amazing. I have only read the short-story Guts by Chuck Palahniuk, but I can definitely feel his influence on this piece. I really loved the narrative, and just the style all together. It was quite different from anything I've ever read on this site, in a great way.

    Everything came together so nicely and I'm speechless otherwise. Wonderful job! c:
    July 15th, 2012 at 12:50am
  • gar-bage

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    Wow, holy crap. You are incredibly talented. You've given the narrator such a distinctive voice. The imagery you use, the vulgar words, it's all perfect. So amazing.
    July 14th, 2012 at 07:57pm
  • wx12

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    I can tell you've been reading Palahniuk, and it brought out something awesome in your own writing.

    The narrator you use in this story is what makes it awesome. Sure, the plot is interesting, but the way you had this jaded, vulgar guy explaining everything is so engaging for me as a reader.
    "just because she watches Law and Order that she’s not a fucking detective"
    I love that; the way you use his internal monologue to let us in on his personality is great.

    "You could be worm buffet"

    Should that be "a worm buffet? I guess it works either way, but with the "a" in there, you have this cool rhyming rhythm thing going on with buffet/gourmet.
    July 14th, 2012 at 07:39pm
  • boyking

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    holy shit, this is great. i love galen and his character and the way you write him out, there's so much personality and i don't know how to explain it without sounding like a fuckin idiot but it's really good. this story idea is interesting and intriguing and the way you describe things is amazing. i can't wait for the next chapter because i feel like this is definitely already one of my favourite stories on here
    July 14th, 2012 at 07:26pm
  • kahlo

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    The dialogue and the style is wonderful and I adore it and I can't stop laughing and it's just beautiful and awesome and like ~~weird~~ but um. you should consider updating soon because i'm recommending and subbing and idk bro I mean it'd be pretty cool if you did. soon. c:
    July 14th, 2012 at 07:15pm