We'll Settle Down - Comments

CS! I like the picture and the description you used in it. I don't really like one-shots. There is always more to stories then this, I don't know it doesn't really seem like a complete scene...but I do like the effort. There are some errors that were probably overlooked, but I do wanna say you really do have talent. Although I don't see your full potential in this, I might actually look into your other work.;)

My favorite line in this story was "She let Mike be the guide for their future." I think that line by itself pretty much summed up the story and the personalities of the characters.
There didn't seem to be much going on in this story, aside from them talking about getting an apartment and going on holiday, so it was a little dull, but the writing style was good. You write very well, I just think this story could have used a little more as far as its plot! Other than that, good job!

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Layout - The layout is very, very simple. Almost gloomy and boring, but I do like the picture.

Summary - I thought the summary was poetic in a way, kinda cute too.

Story - I wasn't very fond of the start, because the sentences were a bit odd to me, they seemed like fragments and didn't seem to stand well on their own.

However the story as a whole is nice with details and their was a hint of comedy by the dialogue of the two characters. This is a cute story, but I think it was cut short and needs a little bit more too it. I didn't really get into it.

Overall it was a nice quick read, but it wasn't something I would read by choice.

I got recommended to this story from comment swap. The writing is very clean and simple, which I like. I wasn't very interested in the story itself. I was a bit bored, but I got the point of the story clearly, which is good. I like the description that the writing has. I like how you were able to get the character's personalities across in such a short time. Bravo, you did a very good job. Keep writing!

"The sky overhead grey, cloudy." That feels like a part of a sentence, not a sentence itself. If you threw a "was" in there it would hold it's own better.

Short and sweet is such a refreshing, lovely change of pace. You get right to the point, quickly but effectively accessing the heart of Em and Mike's relationship with one fell swoop. And it works. I love that they dream, despite what they're given in life and they feel like as long as they have each other everything will be alright. Your story was just sweet. Best of luck with it!!!

I like this story. I got here via comment swap feature. I love the back ground and the banner. It's a little simple though. And the summary is short. I like the story content. It flows really well and what not. Can you check out my story Letters to Dad? It would mean a lot.

I really like the ideas but I'm sorry I can't really get into it, I'm going to subscribe and read it again soon. I love the layout and the image it's really good but I'm not feeling it, I'm sorry but like I say I will subscribe and I will read it again, I'll also recommend it too :)

I absolutely loved the tone of this story. It's a really great beginning; just a nice, sweet and slow chapter. I especially liked the dynamic between the characters. The description of New York was good, too, and it made me feel like I was there. The picture on your layout also helped, I think it fits well with the story.

I hope you will continue, even if it's not with this story. You have great writing potential. Well done and good luck in the future.

The air of this piece was whimsical and sweet, especially with the ending. You painted the picture of busy New York streets nicely.

I know it was a one shot, but I still think that more description would've been nice. You described New York and it's inhabitants nicely, but no mention for Mike or Em.

At the beginning, the sentences came out choppy and awkward to read. I think it was just the periods separating everything New York-esque.

I liked this. (: It was short, sweet, and reminded me of a lot of the stuff I'll say with my friends. "We'll do this and that, but it'll never REALLY happen." Good job!

I started off a bit confused since the intro seemed to be all over the place. Also, I do not like the layout as much. I like the detailing though, it seems to fit right into the flow of the story. I understand that this is for a contest and such, but I wish you would have made it flow a bit better, but I still have no complaints. I really enjoyed this. It's a beautiful piece of writing that you have to get used to, a couple of paragraphs in that is.

Hi there, I hail from comment swap! Not Manhattan, sadly. But you did hook me right into the story with the quote on the summary. the summary itself is unique, but simple & professional! I'm a sucker for detail, and I LOVE the way you describe the surroundings! & the way you portray the friendship is wonderful! I love it & ill be be back to read more! :)

Sorry, forget to recommend. Still love this! XD

That was beautiful. I have a friend almost just like that! I loved it.