First of all, I LOVE Fall Out Boy and this song, so I am pleasantly surprised that comment swap brought me here. The premise of this story is adorable, but like most of the other comments have stated, I think development needs to happen to prevent the story from becoming a cliche. Losing somebody really takes it's toll on a person, and I think it's great that you're exploring it. I'd like to you delve more descriptively into the way that it affects Shane, but maybe that's just the psychology major in me! Nevertheless, good job! It was a fun read!
November 2nd, 2012 at 06:06am