Screaming for Salvation - Comments

One, I definitely like the story layout it's fitting to the story. Second I like how short this but it's able to convey a lot of emotions. You did a good job of describing the character in first person, I almost feel bad for her. I like the sinister feel it has at the beginning and end. Was a good read and I'm glad comment swap recommended it to me :)

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I love this. I'm a huge GA fan and I can't wait to see where this goes. It kind of reminds me of a darker United States of Tara(: I love the whole multiple personality disorder, and I really love the dark suspenseful twist you've given it. The detailing is awesome, not to much and just enough to keep us wondering.

Really great work!!
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Dakota(:

Please keep going!!

Although this story is very different than all the others, which I appreciate and really do enjoy, the font type seems a little hard to read. It's very small and the black on the dark green makes it a little difficult in the chapters part, the summary area is fine but the chapter’s font is rather small, but otherwise the plot and the characters seem to be very well written and I enjoyed the first little taste you gave us of Sade and what is going on in her life. To assume that this will not follow the mainstream type of Ghost Adventures shouldn’t be a problem, I’m just curious as to how you’re going to tie this all together. I am interested to see where this goes and how it all pans out for the people in the end. Once again (since my mouse pad is touchy) I hope you update this soon and that you stick with this story. The idea is original, at least as far as I’m concerned, and it seems like a good story. I will repeat what all the other comments seem to be saying, your writing is rather descriptive and I enjoy that, you paint details very clearly and don’t leave the reader guessing on what you’re trying to describe. Hopefully you update this soon! :)

I liked this, it's different than any of the other Ghost Adventures stories I've read. Hope you update soon :)

I know I already commented on here, but can you please update this story? Please please please! It is rare to find someone who is as fluent with their writing and can capture the scene of the story as well as you, so please don't waste your talent!! I really want to read more of this, I've been left hanging here wondering what's going to happen next and I'm sick of reading stories that don't interest me! So I'd love it if you would take the time to update this :-) Please and thank-you!

This is a very good story for one that's written in first person. It's hard for me to find someone use first person effectively. The font is pretty small for me, so that made it kind of tough for me to read.

I think this story has an interesting start, I really like this first chapter. The idea seems original, which I always like to see, and the writing really drew me in. I always like being thrown into a story, it makes me think. I'm interested in seeing where this story is going to go.

Otherwise, the layout is very nice, I like the cool colors. Very well done on the story, and good luck on your future writing!

Ohhh, you've definitely got me interested in this. You have to keep writing and update soon because I want to know what's going to happen!
As always, your writing is amazing. Wonderfully descriptive and you've got me hooked on yet another one of your stories. Hurry up girly! I want more!

[Comment Swap] I really like the summary. It's well written and definitely gets you curious as to what this story is all about. I had to look up the existing people that were mentioned, but once I saw that it was Ghost Adventures, I knew who they were. So this is my first time reading a Ghost Adventures fanfic. Now, I must say that this is absolutely fantastic. Your writing is just wonderful. I love the tone and the narrations and the descriptions. It just makes it so easy to picture everything. I think I'm definitely going to subscribe because I'd love to see where this goes.

You're such a good writer! It's so descriptive that I feel like I'm watching a film as I read it haha. This is dark and twisted, but I like it.

Holy Shit! Comment swap actually gave me a good story. And is this girl cray or what? I don't like the sound of this Dr. Schimek. I really enjoy you descriptive writing and how correctly your grammar usage is. Good luck on this story in the future. I'm subbing, so I'll drop back in later!

Your writing is so descriptive and it's so easy to get into the character's point of view and I love that! Your grammar, sentence structure, and spacing are great too! I feel like a lot of the writers on here have problems with that. I really liked this. It's like I could feel her struggles and her pain but the fact that she still has hope gives me hope. Loved it! Keep up the great work!
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Okay, so you know already how horribly infatuated I am with your writing. I know that this used to be a story before, but I cannot tell you ENOUGH how much better it is then the old version. Your writing has grown so much, and the detail in this is absolutely spectacular. I don't think you give yourself enough credit--because this is absolutely brilliant. You can feel the struggle in her not to take the meds, to not give into whatever world they want her to desperately live in. And that's a feat that's hard to overcome. I cannot wait until the next chapter, and to get this story really rolling. It's going to be an absolute hit.