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  • Lady.V.

    Lady.V. (960)

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    Dear author, I really enjoyed reading this but it didn't give me the feeling of a one-shot. It felt like sort of a prologue of a chaptered stoqy. Your summary was captivating and pulled me in right away. I liked the plot and how the events moved (the fight with her ex, the new boyfriend avoiding her, her characteristics and the statement from the one who loves her). It was just great. Brownie points for the way you put those different parts together in your own unique way. I subscribed and I can't wait for more. That's all from me so bye. ~Marian.
    February 1st, 2013 at 12:57pm
  • Lady.V.

    Lady.V. (960)

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    Dear author, I really enjoyed reading this but it didn't give me the feeling of a one-shot. It felt like sort of a prologue of a chaptered stoqy. Your summary was captivating and pulled me in right away. I liked the plot and how the events moved (the fight with her ex, the new boyfriend avoiding her, her characteristics and the statement from the one who loves her). It was just great. Brownie points for the way you put those different parts together in your own unique way. I subscribed and I can't wait for more. That's all from me so bye. ~Marian.
    February 1st, 2013 at 12:57pm
  • GoodGirl;

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    I love this. I love how you used pronouns for it, making it all the more mysterious, drawing me in!! Over all, I looove it!! The layout's gorgeous and I subbed and recced!! It's awesome!!
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    I LOVVVE THIS!! I can't wait to read more but it's amazing as a one-shot too. I love these kinds of one-shots!! :):)
    October 23rd, 2012 at 01:17am
  • Heatherette3

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    First of all, love the summary.. It reminded me of a poem and I thought it was cute.
    Secondly, the first words, "He" and "She," I wasn't sure if you did that purposely, or if that's their names, but if it were me I would probably write "They" instead.
    As for the storyline, I like it! It's cute, origional, and your use of words seem very vintage-like and I think it will go far. Good luck!
    October 16th, 2012 at 10:44pm