@ KatXWidowXHawk Hey thanks for the comment! But yea te story is still active thing have just been crazy with school and other personal stuff so update are slow rigt now
@ VampGirl4eva Oh ha sorry, the next chapters will be longer, but I have famIly and town an other personal stuff going on!! But I promise the next ones will be longer!!! Sorry but thanks for your comment!!
Stupid twitter and pictures gosh no privacy at all and Matt is in his thirties soo he isn't too young for a grandchild it would be different if he was in his twenties thn he would be too young but he isn't sooo back off fans ok let him and his family have their own privacy without it being exploited on the Internet fuckers, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)
Love it, I'm glad tht Arie is ok now let's hope tht the baby Molly is ok, stupid fans they better not post tht crap on the Internet unless they want to get sued, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)
Howdy, I'm from from comment swap and I don't mean to offend, I'm here to help out.
So I have a few things I'm a little nit-picky about. First off, your chapters are very short and switch point of view a lot. If you have short chapters, just put the next POV in the next chapter.
Two, I don't really understand this whole thing ... I guess a few things went over my head, but I don't know what's really going on here. Where do the OC's tie in with a7x ? I'm at a serious loss here.
However, to end on a positive note, I do like the way you describe things. You don't describe just the way things look, but the feelings of things. I really dig that. Also you had a pretty decent sex scene, as short lived as it was. Good luck!
Damn it I really thought tht Arie can give birth to the baby in peace, stupid twitter and which ever employee tht works at the hospital posted a tweet about Arie being in labour should get sued but thts just my opinion, anyhoo can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)
Omg tht baby is almost here!!! I'm sooo excited :) anyhoo I think tht Gage and Arie r goin to be great parents, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)
I got here through comment swap. First of all I wanna say, I love the layout, except for the middle part...I think it's so small it looks a bit weird, but the rest of it is great! And now to the story...I have read the first seven chapters and I would have read more, but there's just a few things that I don't really like about this story. The story idea itself is great, really. It's an interesting plot and there's a lot of positive aspects, but I feel like one big problem is that there's not enough details in the story. This could be a lot more emotional and moving, if only you'd give the readers a bit more to work with. That way, the way you skip scenes all the time would be barely noticeable too. I just feel that this story is missing some things, but it isn't bad! You seem to be a good writer, just maybe try to work on some things. :)
Hey thanks for the comment! But yea te story is still active thing have just been crazy with school and other personal stuff so update are slow rigt now