I really like how different this story is from all the others on this sight. There were no typos or mistakes, at least none that I could spot. It definitely gives the impression that you are knowledgable and have a passion for the culture, if I am mistaken then my apologies. That is merely the impression that I got. I do have to disagree with one of the comments about the "unnecessary background info", I think it makes it more intriguing and enticing, I am curious even more so now to know what happened to the brother. I think giving slight, vague, background information adds to it, not take away from it. You seem like you have all of this planned out and it is very delphic, and that is being said in a positive way.
October 8th, 2014 at 03:05am