Right Now and Not Later - Comments

One of the best Mibba short-stories I have ever read.

OH. MY. GOSH. This was truly amazing!! The fact that you keep the reader guessing and not knowing what is going on until the very end is genius. Throughout the whole thing I was trying to figure out what was happening and who Antonio was, trying to connect the dots. That's what intrigued me, and made me want to read more and more. This was way more than just good. You really did an amazing job with it. And her dying at the end? I didn't expect that. Nice touch.

No grammatical errors. And the layout is super awesome! Hahah
You are a really great writer! Keep it up, I mean it! :)

(I apologize for any bad english.)

Wow this was just amazing! Like I dont even know what to say! Its left me speechless! I am in love with your layout. Its just amazing! And the story is really well written!
Im sorry I feel like I stole a comment. D= But your story really is good! I just dont know what to say about it...in a good way ^^

Xoxo
Kas

First off, I have to say that I really like your layout. It's simple but very pretty.

She has cleared out every trace of him in her room I think the word has in that sentence disrupts the flow of the story. It would sound better as had or even if it was taken out completely.

Wow, I really really liked this. At first, I thought Antonio was just some creepy stalker ex-boyfriend, but of course it turns out that I was wrong. I like Janie as a character and I really feel for her.

I love the ending. I like how she she died of apparently natural causes instead of something more violent she had done to herself. There's a beauty about it that I don't really know how to explain.

Overall, well done. I'm very glad I found this and I wish it was longer.

I loved it!!!!!!! i think you should expand it into a longer story, it would make a great novel. keep writing!