I would have chopped the sections up and made this a small story of about 4-5 chapters. This all together seems very mashed together and it does not flow quite as well. I enjoyed when Andy actually went insane and said screw it I can do whatever I want to do. The flash backs helped a bit to explain but I would have fleshed them out some more. I mean there is a gold mine of things you could have done with it. Similar to Mark Waid's Irredeemable a character that could have tugged at our emotions towards him. The idea that he might have always grown up to be like this or that he was the victim of unfortunate circumstances is always a good card to play. I was confused at the conversation at the end, that he was just going to come back. I felt like Andy was the type of character that would just die and it would be a black stain on human history. I understand wanting the grey ending but still sometimes things are clear cut. I enjoyed this overall and I found it very appealing. I wish you luck and may the pen be ever in your favor.
August 1st, 2012 at 11:00pm