Your a talented writer. You should check out my story Skylar. It's only on chapter three so far.
November 17th, 2012 at 09:30pm
Awesome also about cliches, those are familiar phrases, settings, characters, events that happen in a story. They sometimes seem self-explained because they are familiar, but they just make stories boring. So fill your story with as many unique details as you can, but not irrelevant ones, bring things in for a reason.
Also, playing with sentence length would probably be helpful for you too. Here'a an example I'm sure you will like:
"This sentence has five words. Here are five more words. Five-word sentences are fine. But several together become monotonous. Listen to what is happening. The writing is getting boring. The sound of it drones. It’s like a stuck record. The ear demands some variety. Now listen. I vary the sentence length, and I create music. Music. The writing sings. It has a pleasant rhythm, a lilt, a harmony. I use short sentences. And I use sentences of medium length. And sometimes, when I am certain the reader is rested, I will engage him with a sentence of considerable length, a sentence that burns with energy and builds with all the impetus of a crescendo, the roll of the drums, the crash of the cymbals–sounds that say listen to this, it is important."
All the best.
