Merely the Shadow of a Dream - Comments

Comment swap, here! Like others have said before, I really like the poem at the beginning. It gives a lot of insight into what the premise of the story will be. The story is very good so far and the voice is perfect. There's an air of innocence that I really enjoy. Overall, really good job.

Wow, your writing is so pure and innocent, it's like a young maiden's dream! :)
I like your poem in the summary so don't be ashamed! :D <3
I love this prologue, it's so unique (it's like a letter) and the descriptions of this boy adn her dreams... well, maiden and sweet-like.
I love william shakespeare myself ^.^
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I liked your poem at the beginning of the story, it gives an insight into what this story may be about.

I would suggest not breaking up the story like you have. It takes away the flow of the story by being broken up so much. I did like your wording though, and it would have flowed nicely if it was in paragraphs.

I can't really say anything about the characters or the plot because this is just the beginning of the story. It seems to have promise though, and I hope you keep updating!

I love the poem at the beginning in telling what to expect from the story. The idea sounds great, and I can’t wait to see where you go with this! I like the description, though there’s not a lot to go by yet it is still well written. Keep up the great work! I’m also recommending the story as well.