This is brilliant. Your descriptions are so gorgeous.
The summary is short, but quite eloquently written. It reminds me of a poem, for some reason, and it's so intriguing: I was compelled to read on, haha.
"I drop my cigarette, which had been dancing on my bottom lip for a relentless ten minutes, and put it out with the sole of my boot. The remaining smoke that was held in my lungs, seeps from my lips, and I pull out my keys to dangle from my fingers."
I have no words to describe how utterly flawless this is. I especially love the phrases 'seeps from my fingers' and 'dancing relentlessly on my bottom lip'.
They are such vividly painted images, and after reading the first paragraph I was fully sucked in.
"Quickly, being annoyed of the distinct smell, I dropped the half used cigarette to the ground, and crunched it beneath the tip of my boot, crushing bits of glass as well."
This is just fabulous. When I read it, it's like I can literally hear the crunching of glass.
You've got an amazing range of vocabulary. You'e such a talented writer, and I hope you update this soon because it's beautiful. Only one chapter and I adore it. Subscribed and Recommended!
The summary is short, but quite eloquently written. It reminds me of a poem, for some reason, and it's so intriguing: I was compelled to read on, haha.
"I drop my cigarette, which had been dancing on my bottom lip for a relentless ten minutes, and put it out with the sole of my boot. The remaining smoke that was held in my lungs, seeps from my lips, and I pull out my keys to dangle from my fingers."
I have no words to describe how utterly flawless this is. I especially love the phrases 'seeps from my fingers' and 'dancing relentlessly on my bottom lip'.
They are such vividly painted images, and after reading the first paragraph I was fully sucked in.
"Quickly, being annoyed of the distinct smell, I dropped the half used cigarette to the ground, and crunched it beneath the tip of my boot, crushing bits of glass as well."
This is just fabulous. When I read it, it's like I can literally hear the crunching of glass.
You've got an amazing range of vocabulary. You'e such a talented writer, and I hope you update this soon because it's beautiful. Only one chapter and I adore it. Subscribed and Recommended!