I like the plot and start of it. I think she has a great personality as well.
Just a friendly tip; space out your dialogue. It should've been something like this instead.
“Leave me alone, Harry.” I looked at him, gritting my teeth. This went the same way every time, he would try to provoke me and I’d resist for a while. Then I’d get pissed and retaliate. And that’s when he got to me the most.
“I know you want to talk to me, Miller.” He called me by my last name, an annoying habit he’d recently developed.
“You’re such an ass, leave me alone.” I glared at him once again before I set my eyes back to the board.
“Ooh, little miss weirdo learned some new curse words.” He chuckled.
Just a friendly tip; space out your dialogue. It should've been something like this instead.
“Leave me alone, Harry.” I looked at him, gritting my teeth. This went the same way every time, he would try to provoke me and I’d resist for a while. Then I’d get pissed and retaliate. And that’s when he got to me the most.
“I know you want to talk to me, Miller.” He called me by my last name, an annoying habit he’d recently developed.
“You’re such an ass, leave me alone.” I glared at him once again before I set my eyes back to the board.
“Ooh, little miss weirdo learned some new curse words.” He chuckled.
Over all, I like it.