I Hate Everything About You - Comments

  • dawn of light

    dawn of light (100)

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    I like the plot and start of it. I think she has a great personality as well.

    Just a friendly tip; space out your dialogue. It should've been something like this instead.

    “Leave me alone, Harry.” I looked at him, gritting my teeth. This went the same way every time, he would try to provoke me and I’d resist for a while. Then I’d get pissed and retaliate. And that’s when he got to me the most.

    “I know you want to talk to me, Miller.” He called me by my last name, an annoying habit he’d recently developed.

    “You’re such an ass, leave me alone.” I glared at him once again before I set my eyes back to the board.

    “Ooh, little miss weirdo learned some new curse words.” He chuckled.


    Over all, I like it.
    August 1st, 2012 at 08:07pm
  • sportsfanatic19

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    I can tell this is going to be a great story! Please update!
    August 1st, 2012 at 03:54pm
  • Chasing Cars

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    I really like this. Please keep writing.
    August 1st, 2012 at 06:22am