Like Lovers Do - Comments

Not sure if your still updating this - the concept is so great though. A Christian amongst atheists - never read a story from that angle. Your descriptive text is beautiful; poetic really. I don't understand how you don't have 1000+ comments though I guess mibba isn't as popular anymore. Honestly you're an amazing writer.

Comment Swap! Really good summary. I'm a picky reader, but it had me hooked to read more. The story is good even if it is cliched and I find the characters likeable and relatable as well. Your grammar is good and there's a nice flow to your writing. No unnecessary jumps or unexplained breaks. All in all, well written and I hope you overcome your writer's block to make some more of this lovely story soon. On a me note, Henry is my favorite character so far :) Amelia follows close behind.

Comment Swap )) Absolute Perfection. I've never read a story that has drawn me in so easily as this one did. Your writing is fantastic and the grammar and usage of the words was worth an A. I sure am glad that comment swap brought me here. I've never been a fan of cliches, but this was so much different from the rest in a way I cannot describe. It's elegantly written which makes the cliche blend in. This girl is an outcast for other reasons besides the stereotypical music choice. 20/10

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The summary was perfection. It's something that completely pulls you in and your writing keeps people reading. I've always loved the "opposite attracts" cliché and you make it work extremely well. I don't even know what to say! There are so many good things to say that I don't know where to start!

I didn't spot many mistakes and for the most part, everything was really well written. The characters are very clear and realistic. I usually find that people tend to make all of their characters the same and it's basically one person with different names, but you made them all very unique. Good for you and update soon :)

Honestly, you already had me captivated by your descriptions on the summary page. The first chapter left me even more fascinated with the way you write. I absolutely love the fact that this story's based on A Walk to Remember — it's a book I enjoyed reading (and also brought me to tears).

With regards to your writing, I like how you were able to bring scenes to life by describing them perfectly. I am able to feel how Marie Luce pretty much feels like an outcast because of her beliefs. Also another thing that I like is the fact that although this was written in third person POV, you were still able to make us readers see what's really going on in the minds of your characters. Great job on this piece, and good luck.

I love it! Your writing style, while simple, conveys the story very elegantly. You paint a picture in my head without over describing everything. I also like how you describe expressions, if that makes sense ha-ha. Another thing I liked was how you mentioned the whole atheism or agnostic thing being a fad. There is so much truth to that it's unbelievable! I also really enjoyed the contrast between the two. Especially what you said in the introduction; it really drew me in. Anyways, keep updating it's good!

I love it! Your writing style, while simple, conveys the story very elegantly. You paint a picture in my head without over describing everything. I also like how you describe expressions, if that makes sense ha-ha. Another thing I liked was how you mentioned the whole atheism or agnostic thing being a fad. There is so much truth to that it's unbelievable! I also really enjoyed the contrast between the two. Especially what you said in the introduction; it really drew me in. Anyways, keep updating it's good!

In the first chapter I really loved how you opened up with a very descriptive telling of a tree. Really draws a person in. I love how you manage to focus the story around Marie and her strong religious beliefs. But if this is set during modern times which I believe it is then I don't feel like there would be this much hostility towards her and the way she feels about said religion. I don't think people would really care that much and mock her like that. With that being said I really do like how you incorporate religion and how descriptive this story is. I really really like the take on the whole girl girl and bad boy theme. You just can't ever go wrong with those. Keep up the good work.

hvlgkhgkfdnhgkdjfngkdn you updated! :D Yay! I was so excited when this popped up in my email.

Anyway, great chapter like always :) keep the updates coming!

Comment Swap: I really love your writing style, its very unique with details, but not too many details to where its hard to concentrate on what you are saying. I really like this story. I love the good girl bad boy type of stories and this is definitely one that holds my interest. (: Update soon please.

So considering I just finished a book series consisting of good-girl-bad-guy love story, I love your take on it! I love this whole type of story, and am definitely getting into this genre. I really liked your way of writing in this as well, it was really good. :D Keep writing!

Wow, this seems like a really great story. I've only read the first chapter, but I am definitely already hooked. I love the whole idea of a good girl and a bad boy. I will definitely subcribe. ;D Keep up the great work!

Ahh! I loved this chapter (Black Betty)! I can't wait to see Betty's future in the story :) Update soon!

Oops.. I think I know what Ryan did now...

I just LOOOVE how you connected rumours to love.. and you wrote it out just the way its felt! Bravo!
for the voting thing, I am interested in Andy/Marie's story and Dave?Gwen's as well.. why is Gwen crying? You didn't mention what Ryan did to her :) (in chapter 7)

This is a very interesting story! You have a way with words, I can really feel the emotions your characters are going through. Your characters are all easily distinguishable and unique too! Which is nice because some people have a hard time creating strong individual characters! Especially when there's more than one.
Your grammar and punctuation are all superb! It always makes me happy when I see it done correctly hah I guess I'm just weird like that. You did have a little oops though. I think I was the second chapter when Andy was with another guy and in one of the paragraphs you put 'her' but I think you meant 'him'!
Other than that little thing, you have a great story. It's interesting and it wasn't confusing with all the different POV type things.
Keep up the good work!

I found this story by the comment swap thing, by the way. I think the summary really jumped out at me. I loved the different metaphors you used to contrast differences. I agree with one of the comments below. The treatment was a little harsh if it is set in modern times. I think the writing and word choice and word placement are phenomenal. As well as the plot!

I found this story by the comment swap thing, by the way. I think the summary really jumped out at me. I loved the different metaphors you used to contrast differences. I agree with one of the comments below. The treatment was a little harsh if it is set in modern times. I think the writing and word choice and word placement are phenomenal. As well as the plot!

I found this story by the comment swap thing, by the way. I think the summary really jumped out at me. I loved the different metaphors you used to contrast differences. I agree with one of the comments below. The treatment was a little harsh if it is set in modern times. I think the writing and word choice and word placement are phenomenal. As well as the plot!

This is really cute; I like the contrast of religious and non-religious... Although i find the ratio of non-believers and believers in the school a bit skewed--maybe that's because I've been born and raised in the Bible Belt where everyone is Christian of some sort with the exception of the maybe 5%.

Their treatment of Betty confuses me. Just because of her skin color, in this day and age aren't we past that? That seems a bit extreme, or is this written in this sixtes or some other time? Sorry, just curious.

Overall though, you've got a very nice flow, and a very lovely writing style. I can't find any errors in what you write truthfully. Nothing is choppy or too long or short; you measure everything perfectly and it all just works so well for your story. I can't wait to see how all of your characters stories intertwine in the long run. Best of luck with this!