Stony Park - Comments

Comment swap.

When I first started reading this I felt conflicted on whether or not you could pull offthis particular subject. I understand the direction you're going for, and was more or less pleased that you were able to carry it out so beautifully. It gives me great pleasure in knowing that this isn't the typical cliche story that most authors try to write in order to relate to the public's eye. Your storyline is original and heartfelt, and relates to the many lives of people who have lost someone in there lives. All in all, I am more than pleased with the outcome of this story.

Your writing style is beautiful. I absolutely LOVE the ending of chapter one, when Milo says "Can you fucking imagine that? Never being found. People just stop looking for you, no one disappears like that. Someone gives up." because it sort of adds a sense of mystery and thought to the story. The fourth paragraph of chapter three adds a lot of suspense as well, while the parts where you talk about Milo and his parents moving Andrew in and him finding porn on Andrew's computer adds a realistic sense to your characters.

In short, I love this story! Definitely subscribing. The only thing I really don't like is that the background is a gif, its super distracting. To me anyways lol

Daaamn. I want to be original and come up with something on my own without sounding like the other comments but with this I can't. So here it goes, three chapters in and I'm hooked. I have not read a story on here that's had me hooked after the first chapter in a very long time. You're an amazing writer, plain and simple. I hope you continue this idea, because I'm loving this, and so are ten others. I don't know if it's just be though, but after sitting through three chapters of the story, and the GIF in the background...it started to make me feel as if I were high.

This story, even though there is only three chapters, is really amazing. I think it was a wonderful way to start a story like this. The main character, Milo I believe, seems so worried in the prologue, and the first two chapters, but still tries to make excuses as to where his brother is, as if denying it, and that is something that I like. It makes his character seems so real, and assures that he really does care about his brother despite the things that he says about him.

I think this is a really good story so far! Good job.

Hey, comment swapper here.
this is a really interesting concept and I'm really enjoying it! Very original and VERY well written!
My only complaint would be the background as I found the GIF a bit distracting ( but that's just personal taste) however I am really enjoying this and hope you update soon :)

oh my god i love your backround!!! and not to mention you have an amazing writing style!!!!!!! The characters feel so real as if i'm friends with them!!!!!!!!!!! And I kinda wish I did, hahaha!! It is just fantastic and I love it!! Keep going!! I cant wait to read the end:) ans sorry for any spelling errors, hahahahaha:):)

Only three chapters in, but I am hooked! This sounds like an interesting story, even though its exactly the sort of thing I wouldn't normally read. The characterisation is brilliant. They come across as so realistic and you describe them amazingly. Keep going with the story!

This is the only story I've actually read all the way through on here in a long time. This is awesome. Wow. I don't even know what to say. Your writing style just really drew me in and the plot is fantastic. Keep going!

This is the only story I've actually read all the way through on here in a long time. I haven't even read this much into a book in a long time, either. This is spectacular. Wow. I don't even know what to say.

fuck i dont even know what to do but this was fantastic and its giving me the creeps especially those trEES and maybe cause i still feel high from yesterday???? but i want to cry because this was glorious

and dont think for a moment that i didn't pick up on the chevy impala thing

This is utter brilliance.

its so good and so much better than i could ever imagine jesus christ and im still jonesing over your character descriptions

This sounds like a really interesting story and your writing style is great.
I really hope you continue to write this. There's barely any good original stories on this site.